at the first glace, it seems that this statement is correct and super screen have to pay more attention to the advertising, however, there is some mistake inside this statement which doesn't clearly explained.
first, it states that the attended people have reduced compared to the last year this statement shows that there are some people who know here are some movies but they don't want to attend anymore and in this section, the author doesn't explain about it why they don't want to attend.
second in the writing we see that the author talks about the statistic information about the people who write some positive reviews about the movies. it states that this percentage has been increased.while the writer didn't talk about details about this information as how many people write the review and last year among how many people some of them write the positive review.which is very important for example, consider 100 person who attended super screen produced movies last year and 20 people of them write a positive review about the movie and today only 50 people attenuate and again 20 persons write review it may seem that the rate of positive reviews has been increased but in reality it's not. as the percentage of person who attended had been increased this reviews couldn't show the exact excitement of people about the movies. it shows that only a constant person who is in like the movie and write the positive reviews each year but if it clearly explains that what the basement of this increased percentage or states that this person who wrote the review is exactly the last year person or some others, then they can make conclusion about how they could improve the attendance of people in Super Screen producing movie. maybe it doesn't need advertisement and it needs other solution for this problem.
as a conclusion, this statement has some misunderstanding and it needs to be clear more about the percent of people who don't attend anymore and the person who wrote the positive reviews this year compare to the last year. then make a decision about the problem. because based on this strict idea advertising wouldn't be a good solution to solve this problem.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1776 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.661 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.387 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 76.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.784 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.605 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.361 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
at the first glace, it seems that this sta...
^^
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ome mistake inside this statement which doesnt clearly explained. first, it states th...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...tement which doesnt clearly explained. first, it states that the attended people hav...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... who know here are some movies but they dont want to attend anymore and in this sect...
^^^^
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...anymore and in this section, the author doesnt explain about it why they dont want to ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 262, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...author doesnt explain about it why they dont want to attend. second in the writing ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...about it why they dont want to attend. second in the writing we see that the author t...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...some positive reviews about the movies. it states that this percentage has been in...
^^
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...age has been increased.while the writer didnt talk about details about this informati...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ery important for example, consider 100 person who attended super screen produced movi...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...views has been increased but in reality its not. as the percentage of person who at...
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Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
... been increased but in reality its not. as the percentage of person who attended h...
^^
Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... been increased but in reality its not. as the percentage of person who attended h...
^^
Line 3, column 778, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ttended had been increased this reviews couldnt show the exact excitement of people abo...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 840, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... excitement of people about the movies. it shows that only a constant person who i...
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Line 3, column 1235, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...people in Super Screen producing movie. maybe it doesnt need advertisement and it nee...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Super Screen producing movie. maybe it doesnt need advertisement and it needs other s...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1316, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... needs other solution for this problem. as a conclusion, this statement has some...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...eds other solution for this problem. as a conclusion, this statement has some m...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ar more about the percent of people who dont attend anymore and the person who wrote...
^^^^
Line 4, column 223, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...ews this year compare to the last year. then make a decision about the problem. beca...
^^^^
Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...then make a decision about the problem. because based on this strict idea advertising w...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...then make a decision about the problem. because based on this strict idea advertising w...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 309, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...e based on this strict idea advertising wouldnt be a good solution to solve this proble...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83602150538 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39563491691 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41935483871 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 150.305854843 57.8364921388 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 179.9 119.503703932 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2 23.324526521 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284649628422 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121158405481 0.0743258471296 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953396670296 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154403397723 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956701861083 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 14.3799401198 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.197005988 135% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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