Because the future will be dominated by technology we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students If our students take these classes they ll all be able to get high paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives

From the excerpt from a speech given to the school board espoused that as the techonolgy is growing faster and the future will dominate by the technolgy so they are planning to make computer programming mandatory for all the students, the posits that it will help them to get a high paying programming job, and also help in other side of the profession too, however in my opinion the argument rests on the various logical fallacies and suffers from vaguely defined terms. In order to strengthen the argument some evidence need to evaluated.
At the very outset, the author has claimed that the future will be dominated by the techology, however the author did not provide any further clarification of the sentance, how does the author assured that the technology will be dominated the future? that is absent. Which is making this assumption vague. It may happen that in the future there will be no use of technology and people may shift to something different, or the technology may get failed to provide the dominance and people are getting way from the techonology, so without providing any further support of the claim, the claim does not hold water.
Secondly, the author has claimed that if the all the students get a computer science class they will end up getting high paying job, however their is no correlation that having a computer science class may get one a high paying job. It may happen that the high paying job only is being offered to the computer science specilized students, in which case the assumption the author make will be unwarranted.
Thirdly, the author has assumed that all the students are suitable for doing the computer scince course, now computer science course require a math background and it may happen that not every students are quite familiar with mathematics, and not everyone want to do the job in software industries, the correlation the author is drawing here does not provide any suffecient evidence which could actually justify the author claims, and this is making the argument vague.
In contrast, there is no doubt that computer science is a lucrative field and in future it may be the most dominated field. In future many technologies like machine learning, artificial intelligence may have a huge domination in the market, but teching all the student technology may not be benificial, this may happen that many students has different goals for their future, and many could not just understand it.
To conclude, technology is a great field no doubt and in future it may bring lots of changes and the way the author posits his claim does not validate his assumptions and in order to solidify his claim the author need to provide sufficient evidence which can bolster the authors claim otherwise the argument remained questionable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...echnology will be dominated the future? that is absent. Which is making this assumpt...
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Line 2, column 267, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e dominated the future? that is absent. Which is making this assumption vague. It may...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...end up getting high paying job, however their is no correlation that having a compute...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in contrast, no doubt, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2313.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92127659574 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6159494432 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43829787234 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.803984013 57.8364921388 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 192.75 119.503703932 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.1666666667 23.324526521 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 5.70786347227 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320535476553 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120333288186 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093832638008 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171988402481 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962899054391 0.0628817314937 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 14.3799401198 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2268 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.826 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.164 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.418 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5