The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
The argument posits a very complicated issue. A lot of assumptions are being made in the argument and hence various aspects are ought to be addressed. Firstly, the argument mentions the genres of two different stores and specifies the reason why each of them feels that their store will flourish. Further, the provided data is insufficient in a number of ways and is quite absurd in its relation to the issue. The store named Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions whereas the store named Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options.
Let us start by addressing the statement of Namen's executive. The most important relationship is developed between the median income of the suburb of Salem and the expected rise in the sale of the Namen store. Median by no means can provide us the required data whether people are willing to spend more money on fashion designers or not because the median is just the income of the person in the middle of a list of all the people with an income arranged in increasing order. For example, if there are 99 people in the town and when arranged in increasing order of their income, the income of the 50th person is the median of the income of that town. This could mean that the 49 people below the median may have a very low income or close to the 50th person and the 49 people above the median can have a very high income or very close to the income of the 50th person. This data absolutely provides nothing in order to predict the sale of the store Namen.
Likewise, the store Roscoe will flourish if the majority of the people below the median income are small-earning families or vice-versa. Another aspect which should be addressed is the data which says that the population has grown over 50% in the past 3 years. What was the population of the suburb three years ago is another question to be answered. If the population was very small, 50% increase in population would also be negligible and considering the fact that the stores are large, their expected revenue might not go according to the plan and both of the stores might suffer a great loss.
Hence, the argument lacks depth and fails to address various questions regarding before arriving at the conclusion. More telling data regarding the population and the mean income is required in order to reinforce the argument. The size of the store and their required revenue to thrive should also be addressed explicitly. A proper survey of the people living in the suburbs of Salem should also be conducted to know whether the people are more family-oriented or are more lavish in their lifestyle.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 459 350
No. of Characters: 2119 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.629 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.617 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.433 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.366 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, may, regarding, so, whereas, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71677559913 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48931436042 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448801742919 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.914768371 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.947368421 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197852515039 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065086416103 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113222453853 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12702591017 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109110021984 0.0628817314937 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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