The author claims that the life size sculptures value would decrease and the minatures value would increase as per the collectors prediction. The author provides few evidences of molds that are found on Khali island and the minatures having different styles. The stated evidences might look convincing at a first glance, but further evidences are required to consider the argument to be acceptable.
Firstly, the author states that Kalinese artist used molds of hands and head based on discovery of the molds on Kali island. What if other people on Kali island created molds for buisness purposes?. Just beacuse molds were found in Kali island, this does not mean that Kalinese created life size molds. As a result, the author must provide evidences stating that whether only Kali people stayed on the island or any other people.
Secondly, the author claims that minatures are different in style. And molds for these minatures would not be possible. There might be possiblity that molds would be present with Kalinese and might have not revealed about it when survey happend. Just because miniatures are different in style does not conclude that they were not made bu molds. The author must provide stronger evidences regarding this case.
Finally, the author bolsters the variety of style in minatures by stating that Kalinese sculpting tools were found and life size sculptures could not be made by sculpting tools. If sculpting tools were found, does it mean that those tools were used for only minatures?. It might be possible that those tools could have been used for shaping life size molds and also for miniatures. Thus, the author must provide stronger evidenes stating whether sculpting tools were used only for minatures.
To sum up, the author is required to provide above stated evidences in order to consider the given argument to be credible.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author claims that the life size sculptures value would decrease and the minatures value would increase as per the collectors prediction.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: The author provides few evidences of molds that are found on Khali island and the minatures having different styles.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: What if other people on Kali island created molds for buisness purposes?.
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
Sentence: Just beacuse molds were found in Kali island, this does not mean that Kalinese created life size molds.
Error: beacuse Suggestion: because
Sentence: Secondly, the author claims that minatures are different in style.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: And molds for these minatures would not be possible.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: There might be possiblity that molds would be present with Kalinese and might have not revealed about it when survey happend.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Error: happend Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Just because miniatures are different in style does not conclude that they were not made bu molds.
Error: bu Suggestion: bus
Sentence: Finally, the author bolsters the variety of style in minatures by stating that Kalinese sculpting tools were found and life size sculptures could not be made by sculpting tools.
Error: sculpting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: If sculpting tools were found, does it mean that those tools were used for only minatures?.
Error: sculpting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: Thus, the author must provide stronger evidenes stating whether sculpting tools were used only for minatures.
Error: sculpting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Error: evidenes Suggestion: evidences
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1520 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.259 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.347 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'collectors'' or 'collector's'?
Suggestion: collectors'; collector's
...natures value would increase as per the collectors prediction. The author provides few evi...
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Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the minatures having different styles. The stated evidences might look convincing ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 306.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35073425914 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1947781985 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.0 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160889033222 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628917789509 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521279239414 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902604253945 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574965770523 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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