The letter claims that parkville must discontinue organising athletic competition for children under the age of nine. Few evidences regarding the number of injuries, psychological pressure by coach and parents and reduced time for academics are given. At a glance, evidence might seem convincing, but requires further investigation to accept the argument as legit.
Firstly, the author claims that 40,000 of young players have suffered injuries. However, there might be chances of suffering the injuries by indulging in different activities such as accidents that are caused when riding bi-cycle or due to slippery floors in school. The author must provide evidences that injuries of those young players were due to youth league sports.
Secondly, the author claims that interviewing sports league members in several major cities reported psychological pressure from parents and coach. However, there could be other cities of parkville where major support could be provided by parents and coach to win games rather pressuring the players. Hence, author must provide evidences regarding the study that they have done with respect to all the cities and not just limiting to few major ones.
Finally, the author provides a statement given by educational experts that long practice session would take away time that can be used for academic activities. In contrast, the author fails to provide any evidences regarding the relationship between practice sessions and academic activitites. There might be chances that all students would have managed both sports league and their academics well. As a result, author is required to provide evidences that the study interviewed players about their academic progress.
To sum up, few evidences as stated above are required in order to deem the argument as true.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In contrast, the author fails to provide any evidences regarding the relationship between practice sessions and academic activitites.
Error: activitites Suggestion: activities
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argument 1 -- not OK. as told in the topic: 'as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports.'
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 280 350
No. of Characters: 1491 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.091 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.325 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.614 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...to all the cities and not just limiting to few major ones. Finally, the author ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, well, in contrast, such as, as a result, to sum up, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 280.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.475 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64717552597 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1338818175 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.5 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 5.70786347227 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102429076558 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455395866363 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657552564526 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597419090728 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630930377729 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.