Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The procedure implemented by Omega university for grading the effectiveness of their teacher by students has had some negative impacts on students from perspective of their career as stated by the statement. But the conclusion which the university has stated as the solution to this problem is not a effective one. As myriad of faulty assumptions have been considered here.
Firstly, Omega university blaming the procedure to grade teachers by students has led to the increment in the grades os student, which is also thought by the hiring companies is highly flawed. The argument fails to justify as how, just due to this procedure the grades have been increasing for the students. There is highly possible scenario that, fifteen years ago when this new procedure was started, the teachers used to not impart knowledge well. So, this procedure came into existence in Omega University .Thereby alarming the teachers that if they do not get good feedback from students then their jobs are in danger, which led to the teachers advancing themselves in knowledge and ability to explain. Due to which the students started to grasp the subject's knowledge in depth, which gave rise to scoring good marks in exam. Thereby leading the professors to give higher grades.
Secondly, the argument fails to provide a plausible explanation about the 30 percent increase in the marks. It is highly possible that the number of students at Omega University have reduced compared to the strength of students previously. Due to this increment in grades is observed. Another scenario possible in this case which has not been taken into consideration is that, the hiring companies who are thinking that the increased grades does not reflect the capability or success of students is due to many reasons. For instance, consider a scenario where, the hiring companies and employers came for campus placements or even to job fair few years earlier and have recruited students for job. During the time of interview when the students resume is seen, it may show high grades, which may have led to receiving a job offer. But after some months or years, the employer finds the employee not up to standard according to what his grades displayed at college. Due to which the companies concluded that the candidate's success and achievement are not up to the standards of the grades, thereby telling that the grades provided to students of Omega are inflated.
Finally, when the argument points out that Omega and alpha university graduated are not receiving jobs, tells that it could be the case that the location of these universities is very far away from the city or from the hub of companies or even in extreme cases in different state. Many other Universities have their campus situated nearby the companies and which makes the employers go to the nearby universities first and if they are able to get the students who suffice there needs in technical and non-technical aspects , then they will obviously not go the farther located Omega and alpha university. Another plausible explanation regarding unemployment for students of Omega could be, that they do not have proper tie ups with various companies. As professional ties ups with employers attracts the employers to visit the college where college placements are present.
Henceforth, Omega university should initiate a different plan rather than removing the student evaluation process. As this process may help the teachers get better at teaching and thereby be beneficial for the students learning. Therefore, plethora of unwarranted assumptions have been considered in this argument. By analyzing properly, as to why graduates of Omega are not getting employed this issue can be solved.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 607 350
No. of Characters: 3060 1500
No. of Different Words: 271 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.964 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.041 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 187 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 141 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 84 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.722 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.56 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... as the solution to this problem is not a effective one. As myriad of faulty assu...
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Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sumptions have been considered as here. Firstly, Omega university blaming the pr...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'grades'' or 'grade's'?
Suggestion: grades'; grade's
...tudents has led to the increment in the grades os student, which is also thought by th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... came into existence in Omega University .Thereby alarming the teachers that if th...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thereby
...ame into existence in Omega University .Thereby alarming the teachers that if they do n...
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Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'subjects'' or 'subject's'?
Suggestion: subjects'; subject's
...which the students started to grasp the subjects knowledge in depth, which gave rise to ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1012, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'candidates'' or 'candidate's'?
Suggestion: candidates'; candidate's
... which the companies concluded that the candidates success and achievement are not up to t...
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Line 5, column 1166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ided to students of Omega are inflated. Finally, when the argument points out th...
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Line 7, column 523, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s in technical and non-technical aspects , then they will obviously not go the far...
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Line 7, column 752, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... proper tie ups with various companies. As professional ties ups with employers at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3125.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 608.0 441.139720559 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13980263158 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73073915303 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458881578947 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.895004173 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.32 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321245941291 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916906441177 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741953954627 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196975301711 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060394193079 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 98.500998004 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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