Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The writer conclude that students should evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors to reflect it in student's achievement. However, the conclusion rely on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
Firstly, the writer assume that, giving higher grades to students to help them in academics will help them to get a job. Getting job is not totally depend on a grade. Education and knowledge is more important than marks and this will definitely help student to get their job. Grades are just a number that might represent students level of capability but that can not measure level of wisdom. Grades are only help them to qualify for jobs but to get a job knowledge is more important.
In addition, writer assume that, A procedure that encourages students to evaluate teaching effectiveness of all their professors. This might be also affecting student's jobs. Author should give more statistic and information to evaluate this procedure. He should also take over some key factor into account.
Finally, the writer assume that to terminate evaluation program of professors to improve students skills in market but it is not totally depend on that program.The writer provides no evidence, though, to indicate that this is the case. As the argument stands it is highly possible that if the program terminate then students might get jobs in market.
In conclusion, this argument depends on certain simplified assumptions about grades and new evaluation program. The argument would have been more comprehensible if author would have presented absolute figure and statistics to support his claim.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 260 350
and the arguments are not exactly right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1328 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.108 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.373 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
The writer conclude that students should evaluate the teach...
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Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...t is not totally depend on that program.The writer provides no evidence, though, to...
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Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had presented'?
Suggestion: had presented
...have been more comprehensible if author would have presented absolute figure and statistics to suppo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29343629344 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78155250384 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517374517375 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7583022218 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198360787286 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752414266655 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924393827401 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119568846567 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579834948461 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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