Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu

Fifteen year ago, Omega university started a new procedure to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of professors and that time overall grade of the students in omega university risen by 30 percent. As a result of this procedure, omega graduate have not been successful at getting the jobs as have graduate near by alpha university. The author conclude that with the termination of evaluation of the teaching effectiveness of the professors by the students will help the graduates to secure the job. The proposed argument ifs flawed because it rest on unsupported assumption. The evidence presented by the author is not sufficient enough to lead convincingly to the proposed claim, making the argument vulnerable to criticism.

The author assume that overall grade average may have been increased by thirty percent in last fifteen year, but this fact can be independent of the evaluation of professor done by students. The students are getting grades that they do not deserve since they are not securing job despite of higher grades. However, inflated grade could be the result of the change in the pattern of exam. Their could have been change in the past fifteen year which make easier to the students to score in the exam. Therefore, if the student score higher grades, it could be only by the change in the exam pattern. Therefore, the professor should not completely responsible for the increase in the average grade of the students. The presence of any of these factor will seriously challenge the cause and effect relationship between higher grades of the student and the professor evaluation. Had the author mention, that all other factor effecting grades were constant and the effect was triggred only due to professor performance by students, the argument would have been stronger.

Secondly, the author assumes despite the higher grades obtained by the students in omega university, are not able to secure job as compare to the alpha university. However, it is possible that the courses of the alpha university has different type of courses that are more value for the potential employers. Thus the employers seek these courses rather than the courses running in the omega university. It is also likely that the students in the omega university are not able to get the job for themselves as compared to alpha university because they have not been able to perform well in the interview conducted by the employers. In that case, Omega university counselor teach the interview skills to the students rather than abolish the professor evaluation. Had the author represent these advice then the argument would have been stronger.

Thirdly, the author assume that overall average students scored higher grades after the university started the professor teaching evaluation. However, it may be the possibility that the student enrolled in that year more intelligent and more serious in study as compared to the previous year students. New students enrolled get higher grades and previous students get low grades but overall average grade of the students rise by thirty percent. Had the author mentioned the exact grade obtained by each student or represent data class wise , the argument would have been stronger.

Since, the given argument is flawed and rest on the unsupported assumptions. It is vulnerable to criticism by incorporating the points mention above the author could have been bolstered this argument.

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Average: 5.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Fifteen year ago, Omega university start...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, of course, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2879.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19675090253 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70910592827 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.389891696751 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 919.8 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6978588843 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.16 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.16 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35101376152 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102959759268 0.0743258471296 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101719462119 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191676615403 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099054383733 0.0628817314937 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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argument 1 -- OK

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 1. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:

To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: o 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2816 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.083 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 219 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 167 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.839 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.52 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5