This statement tells us that with the teaching evaluation implement fifteen years ago in Omega University, the professors in the unicversity begun to grade higher to his class studetns. This process brought about the fact that with the doubts of these hight grades, the employer hired less Omega gradutates than the graduates from Alpha University. The author suggest the Omega University should terminate the teaching evaluation to the professors. I will adress my view of this advice with three point.
Firstly, what caused the low employment of the Omega graduates should be a complicated question. A wise employer will not judge a potential employee merely on GPA he got at university, there are other important factors apart from the knowledge in the schools. As my concern, teamwork goes first, if a newbee work in a company cannot work with other, he could not solve difficult problem in the future. With the following working pressure, a tough and independent personality will be neccesary to a graduates who about to work. By these concerns, I think there are other problems about the Omega graduates who did not favored by employer.The author shoul make a deep survey to find out the reason why these graduates were less welcome in fact.
Secondly, as my concern about the time, there is no obvious relevance between the less graduates employment and the teaching evaluation system which had ran for fifteen years. The author did not mention the time of the empolyment declining, I doubt when this decling occurred because the process began fifteen years ago. If the less employment happened one year after the implement of evaluation, we may conclude there could be some cohesion between the two matters. If it happened last month, we can figured out the trend is not determined by the evaluation, there must be something else influencing the employers' choice between the two Universities. There is a high possbility that the economy of tha area is in doldrums and the companies could not hire more graduates from Omega University with the certain field which the Alpha University lacks of.
Thirdly, the evaluation of professors from students began fiteen years ago, while without given information about the advice of shutting down prior to the author, there is no evidence prove the failure of this system. I wondered whether this is sugestion before this author that closing down the evaluation system, because it had ran for fifteen years
In conclusion ,I suggest the author make more survey about the evaluation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This statement tells us that with the teaching evaluation implement fifteen years ago in Omega University, the professors in the unicversity begun to grade higher to his class studetns.
Error: unicversity Suggestion: university
Error: studetns Suggestion: students
Sentence: This process brought about the fact that with the doubts of these hight grades, the employer hired less Omega gradutates than the graduates from Alpha University.
Error: hight Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: gradutates Suggestion: graduates
Sentence: I will adress my view of this advice with three point.
Error: adress Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As my concern, teamwork goes first, if a newbee work in a company cannot work with other, he could not solve difficult problem in the future.
Error: teamwork Suggestion: tea work
Error: newbee Suggestion: newer
Sentence: With the following working pressure, a tough and independent personality will be neccesary to a graduates who about to work.
Error: neccesary Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: The author did not mention the time of the empolyment declining, I doubt when this decling occurred because the process began fifteen years ago.
Error: empolyment Suggestion: employment
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There is a high possbility that the economy of tha area is in doldrums and the companies could not hire more graduates from Omega University with the certain field which the Alpha University lacks of.
Error: possbility Suggestion: possibility
Error: doldrums Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: tha Suggestion: than
Sentence: Thirdly, the evaluation of professors from students began fiteen years ago, while without given information about the advice of shutting down prior to the author, there is no evidence prove the failure of this system.
Error: fiteen Suggestion: fifteen
Sentence: I wondered whether this is sugestion before this author that closing down the evaluation system, because it had ran for fifteen years
Error: sugestion Suggestion: suggestion
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2073 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.959 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.956 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...uates from Alpha University. The author suggest the Omega University should terminate t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a graduate' or simply 'graduates'?
Suggestion: a graduate; graduates
...endent personality will be neccesary to a graduates who about to work. By these concerns, I...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...aduates who did not favored by employer.The author shoul make a deep survey to find...
^^^
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun graduates is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ere is no obvious relevance between the less graduates employment and the teaching e...
^^^^
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'graduates'' or 'graduate's'?
Suggestion: graduates'; graduate's
...s no obvious relevance between the less graduates employment and the teaching evaluation ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'run'.
Suggestion: run
...he teaching evaluation system which had ran for fifteen years. The author did not m...
^^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on the time of the empolyment declining, I doubt when this decling occurred becau...
^^
Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'figure'
Suggestion: figure
...ters. If it happened last month, we can figured out the trend is not determined by the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'run'.
Suggestion: run
...n the evaluation system, because it had ran for fifteen years In conclusion ,I ...
^^^
Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...em, because it had ran for fifteen years In conclusion ,I suggest the author make...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... ran for fifteen years In conclusion ,I suggest the author make more survey ab...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, apart from, i think, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.103117506 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66584273799 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52278177458 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4498349832 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179900663604 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686974356362 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812820371942 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993980713971 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841838891229 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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