The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon."For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at

In the argument, the author concluded that the Grandview Symphony has been able to fully support the opration for themself. To bolster the argument, the author cited that private contribution received by the symphony became 3 times last year. In addition, an ticket price increase plan is also mentioned in the argument. However, several questions must be addressed before we could reach the conclusion.

The author cited that last year the increase in private contribution was 2 times and the number of people attending the concerts-in-the-park series doubled, implying that the symphony's revenu...

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... became 3 times last year. In addition, an ticket price increase plan is also ment...
^^
Line 3, column 810, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'drawing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: drawing
...in-the-part program, its not convincing to draw the conclusion that profit from audienc...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2710.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 510.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3137254902 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78910386074 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443137254902 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2921313487 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.230769231 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204079368651 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618771971029 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548366815158 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126571336191 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730309594675 0.0628817314937 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Sentence: In the argument, the author concluded that the Grandview Symphony has been able to fully support the opration for themself.
Error: opration Suggestion: operation
Error: themself Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: For example, the tikcet price might be 2 or 3 times more than that of the original, making some audience drop their plan to the symphony.
Error: tikcet Suggestion: ticket

Sentence: Some audience mgiht choose to go to other symphonies with a lower ticket price.
Error: mgiht Suggestion: might

Sentence: Fame of the symphony mgiht also decline after the increase, thus attendance would decrease in a short time.
Error: mgiht Suggestion: might

Sentence: All these cases might lead to the decline in profit fromm ticket selling.
Error: fromm Suggestion: from

Sentence: In the argument, the author implied that proft situation of the symphony would not deteriorate in the future merely based on its current situation.
Error: proft Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: For instance, there might be economic depression periods throught the city, thus people might not be able to afford the symphony's ticket price.
Error: throught Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Other symphonies mgiht invited some renowned conductors, making the competition much more fierce.
Error: mgiht Suggestion: might

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argument 1 -- OK

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2648 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.172 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.624 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.866 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5