The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the given argument, author Dr. Karp, an anthropologist states about observations of Dr. Field are not correct on the basis of author’s recent interviews with children living in Islands of Tertisa. This argument contains many flaws which are not addressed by author properly. There are many holes and bullets present in the argument made by author. In the conclusion the author’s graduate team will establish more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions. Valid suggestions will be provided to improve this flaws.
At first, the main flaw in the assumption made by author is that he did not mentioned about the details of island visited by him and graduate students and information about island visited by Dr. Field. It may be possible that this islands visited by both anthropologists were different. For example, Dr. Field carried out his observations with the different culture which has different rituals for child-rearing traditions and Dr. Karp’s observations are from different groups. To improve this flaw, proper location of islands should be mentioned by author for further comparison of both observations on child-rearing traditions of islands of Tertia.
Secondly, the other assumption in the author’s assumption is related to time gap between both the observations. Dr. Field has carried this observation around twenty years ago in which it may be possible that this his observations are valid at that period of time. But after twenty years when Dr. Karp recent interviews with children of Tertia island carried out, there may be chances of change in the beliefs of people of Tertia regarding child-rearing traditions. This is one of the major aspects of observation between this two anthropologist. This flaw can be improved by doing more research on the cultures of child-rearing traditions in islands of Tersia.
In converse, it may be possible that recent methods developed by Dr. Karp and graduate students to know the traditions of child-rearing is more accurate. But for that proper analysis of all facts and information should be done. The more information of methods of Dr. Karp should be provided for further analysis.
In sum of all, the author has many flaws in his assumptions which also contains lack of information and others. Proper examples were provided to improve this flaws. Proper research should be done.
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Essay evaluation report
samples:
https://www.testbig.com/story/gre-argument-essay-topic-21-outline
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1943 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.168 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.935 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.646 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...ption made by author is that he did not mentioned about the details of island visited by ...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...d by Dr. Field. It may be possible that this islands visited by both anthropologists...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...this his observations are valid at that period of time. But after twenty years when Dr. Karp r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35106382979 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06864647976 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417553191489 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6016790782 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272993975987 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081234889858 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815035814544 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149057807372 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083640573287 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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