In the article, Dr. Karp compared his research with the Dr. Field, claiming that his conclusion about the Tertia culture is fallacious, since his recent study shows that children in Tertia are reared by their parents instead of the village. Furthermore, he argues that the observation-centered method used by Dr. Field in his research is invalid in studying culture, since his study is erroneous. However, the article written by Dr. Karp is not cogent with several untenable assumptions.
To begin with, Dr. Karp’s study period is 20 years later than that of Dr. Field. As globalization become more drastic, traditional cultures are easily affected by other cultures. There is no evidence showing that Tertia is an insular culture without any contact with the outside world. Twenty years ago, Tertia may be a culture that the entire village play the parental role to raise their children, yet twenty years later, biological parents are the primary one that takes the responsibilities of children due to urbanization and globalization. With different time space, the study result found by Dr. Karp is unable to determine whether the previous result from Dr. Field is truthful. After all, culture is different from the perpetual fact that sun rises in the East, it varies with time.
Moreover, the article relies on the assumption that answers from the children in Tertia can represent the education culture in the village. Though Dr. Karp mentions that children talk about their parents more frequent than the village during the interview, it is not convincing enough to make such conclusion that it is biological parents rearing the children instead of the village based on two reasons. Firstly, there is no specific age group of the children that participate in the interview. After all, a three-year-old child and a thirteen-year-old child can have completely distinct aspects over their own culture. Suppose a three-year-old girl is always talking about her parents in the interview, is it appropriate to make such conclusion in the article? Despite the girl is capable of speaking, she is still too young to aware of others except her closest relatives, parents. Thus it is untenable to draw conclusions from children in this age. Secondly, why do the adults in Tertia not participating in the interview? Compared to children, the adults are mature and judicious, thus the conclusion will be more compelling if supported by the perspectives of the adults.
In addition, the author denies the credibility of observation-centered method based on the opposite results made by Dr. Field. Even there is mistake in Dr. Field’s research, it is unreasonable to make such conclusion. A method that leads to a negative result in a certain situation does not equal to fecklessness. For example, whether light is a wave or a particle was once a famous debate among physicists before Einstein proposed his Photoelectronic Effect, it turns out that light is both wave and particle, but tends to act as waves or particles in different situations. As a result, the observation method might still be useful in different situations when conducting anthropologic researches. Therefore, it is unreasonable to deny a method because of a certain mistake.
In sum, the article proposed by Dr. Karp neglects the situation differences and provides insufficient evidence to substantiate his statement. Besides Dr. Karp underestimates the usage of observation-centered method.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- don't use external examples in GRE argument essays. it is different to GRE issue essays.
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: o 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 553 350
No. of Characters: 2839 1500
No. of Different Words: 258 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.849 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.134 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.075 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 167 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.269 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 886, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... except her closest relatives, parents. Thus it is untenable to draw conclusions fro...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, after all, for example, in addition, talking about, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 55.5748502994 151% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2925.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 553.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28933092224 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1826658309 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 204.123752495 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49547920434 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 897.3 705.55239521 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.347053895 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31263767289 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794611568714 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643598362136 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173244018564 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687477027885 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 98.500998004 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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