The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the observation of Dr Field, Children of village Tertia are reared by the village rather than by their biological parents through his observations. Whereas, recent interviews by him/her states that children of Tertia, talk more about their biological parents than other, which might be a true case. But, some of the conclusion derived from the interviews of Children are questionable.
Firstly, the interview conducted by the students are not exclusive to the village of Tertia, which makes the conclusion general to all the villages under the sample space which consist of other villages. The research done by Dr. field was specific to the village Tertia. On the other hand, we don’t know how many children he/she interviewed from the Tertia to draw this conclusion of invalidating Dr Field’s observation, whereas there is a possibility that he/she would have interviewed only 3 to 4 children from the village as his/her the research was not exclusive to this village per se. Also, Dr Field’s research dates to twenty years, where things might have changed over a period of twenty years.
Secondly, though the children of the village Tertia tend to talk more about their biological parents, doesn’t necessarily mean Dr. field’s observation on the culture of the village is wrong. Because it can be a possibility that children can speak about their parents and the culture of village rearing the children to co-exist. Also, conclusion can’t be drawn from what a person says as it is an individualistic and person-specific aspect.
Thirdly, there is no clarity in what kind of questions were asked to the children which made them answer more about their parents than about culture. Questions would have been more specific to biological parents like who they are? And what are they doing etc. which would have instigated more parent’s specific answers. Also, we really don’t know whether there were cultural specific questions. Thus, the conclusion of regarding a methodology to be flawed is a strong and invalid statement without considering the nuisance and time period of the specific research.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1726 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.946 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.056 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...other, which might be a true case. But, some of the conclusion derived from the interviews ...
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Line 3, column 719, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... changed over a period of twenty years. Secondly, though the children of the vil...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Tertia) must be used with a third-person verb: 'tends'.
Suggestion: tends
...ough the children of the village Tertia tend to talk more about their biological par...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idualistic and person-specific aspect. Thirdly, there is no clarity in what kin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 342.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31578947368 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90802667296 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488304093567 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3854343952 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.625 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21583861004 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776835992084 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733655430703 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144075964357 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070623538755 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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