The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument of the author finds the main cause for the inadequate physical fitness of the citizens of Corpora from the recent decline in the economy, and insists that the rebound of the economic situation will enhance the physical fitness level of the citizens in a recent future. While it may be true that a better economy can encourage people to focus more on the quality of life issue rather than the matter of sustaining their lives, this argument is marred with a few misleading or unclear assumptions.
First of all, by claiming that "this year’s unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and service shows that the recent decline in the economy is mostly likely the cause” of the insufficient physical fitness of the citizens, the author assumes that a positive correlation between the amount of expenditures spent on fitness products and services and the actual fitness level. Although the assumption is partially correct on that a budget of a household can blurredly illustrate what interests members of the household have, readers are still left with a room to question if fitness level of an individual will actually be exacerbated when less money is spent on maintaining the fitness level. Many Corpora citizens could have been aware of the easy ways to work out without spending money, such as walking or biking along the Corpora lakeside. In this case, the assumed correlation between household budget for fitness and actual fitness level of the household members will noticeably become ambiguous.
Furthermore, when attributing the diminished level of physical fitness of Corpora citizens to the recent decline in the economy, the author of the prompt implies that the health condition of Corpora citizens started to get worsen with the beginning of the economic fall. In the prompt, however, no other statistics on the health condition of Corpora citizens is given than the current one and the other one from the 1990s. Since readers are only given the statistics from before and after the economic fall, it is unclear whether the deterioration of the Corpora citizens’ overall fitness level actually happened at the same time with the depression mentioned. It is even possible, to be extreme, that the lowered fitness level of the citizens, who consist the center and major part of the state labor force, caused the economic crisis.
To sustain a healthy and productive society, it is very crucial to maintain a certain average level of fitness among its citizens. For Corpora, of course, it is important to figure out the cause for the drop of the citizens’ average physical fitness level. The author of the prompt has succeeded in providing one possible and seemingly plausible cause for the drop among many others, but she failed to prove that the fitness levels of the citizens will automatically follow when the economic situation is restored.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'of course', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.264367816092 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.109195402299 0.15541462614 70% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111111111111 0.0836205057962 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0325670498084 0.0520304965353 63% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0153256704981 0.0272364105082 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.157088122605 0.125424944231 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0344827586207 0.0416121511921 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74779957345 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0191570881226 0.026700313972 72% => OK
Particles: 0.00383141762452 0.001811407834 212% => OK
Determiners: 0.145593869732 0.113004496875 129% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0153256704981 0.0255425247493 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0095785440613 0.0127820249294 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2914.0 2731.13054187 107% => OK
No of words: 473.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16067653277 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.420718816068 0.378187486979 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.334038054968 0.287650121315 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.200845665962 0.208842608468 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120507399577 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74779957345 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 207.018472906 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.5766528649 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 36.3846153846 23.2022227129 157% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.6872585273 57.7814097925 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 224.153846154 141.986410481 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.3846153846 23.2022227129 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.724660767414 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 69.7884208814 51.9672348444 134% => OK
Elegance: 2.90243902439 1.8405768891 158% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435785652311 0.441005458295 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.202227933387 0.135418324435 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0913156013026 0.0829849096947 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.729623378692 0.58762219726 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142505549676 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.250430178331 0.193483328276 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978696986798 0.0970749176394 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.666590387401 0.42659136922 156% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00224267785623 0.0774707102158 3% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362121278112 0.312017818177 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282097186093 0.0698173142475 40% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 8.0 14.657635468 55% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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