In this letter, the author tells us a study shows there are doubled number of bicycle related accidents today than ten years ago, which focus that the people who wear helmet increased from 35 to 80 percent during the ten years. So the author recommended that the government should educate the riders and not encourage them to wear helmets. But there are some loopholes in this letter and the reasoning for the recommendation is not well supported. We should evalutate them carefully.
To begin with, the study concentrated merely on the helmets wore by the riders without other significant issues. The author indicates during the ten years , the bicycle-related accidents are increasing as twice as it was. This obvious change may be not casued by the single reason that people feeling safe when thet are wearing helmets. There is a high possbility that the vehicles number is increasing in ten years, and the traffic accidents between the bikes and cars are often serious which means the helmets could not protect the riders well. So the author should find out what is the main cause of bicycle-related accidents.What's more, the road conditon is another impotant factors which could casuse the accidents as with more cars on the roads, the roads are more cramped than before, so the riders have to share the road with cars and even trucks, which more serious.
In addition, the development of bicylcles should also be taken into considerations.Firstly, the number of bicycle may increase at the same time as the cars, the possbility of bicycle-related accidents will increase with high possiblity. Secondly, the bicycle technology may also evovle in the ten years. Maybe people ride little bicycle with a low speed, due to the development of bikes especcially bicylce sports, there may be more and more bicycle fans who feel like riding mountain bikes or the road bikes which are much more faster than before. This could also increase the possiblity of the accidents. While the study does not tell us this essential change, it would be arbitrary to make the conclusion.
Finally, the author's recommendation is not well supported by the evidence. As we are discussing before, the author does not show convincing relevance to support his ideas that educate the riders and reduce the encouragements of wearing helmets. Even it is right to educate the people to ride bikes safely, we can not conclude the riders who lack of traffic rules will charge the doubled number of bicycle-related accidents. In that no evidence support this conclusion, all the people in the transportation should be cultivated carefully.
Likewise, with no convincing evidence show the unneccety of wearing the helmets , it is too hasty to let the riders not wear them by the government.
In conclusion, the author's recommendation is not well-supported by the evidence in that the reasons show no essential relavance to the conclsuion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: We should evalutate them carefully.
Error: evalutate Suggestion: evaluate
Sentence: This obvious change may be not casued by the single reason that people feeling safe when thet are wearing helmets.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: casued Suggestion: caused
Error: thet Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There is a high possbility that the vehicles number is increasing in ten years, and the traffic accidents between the bikes and cars are often serious which means the helmets could not protect the riders well.
Error: possbility Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: So the author should find out what is the main cause of bicycle-related accidents.What's more, the road conditon is another impotant factors which could casuse the accidents as with more cars on the roads, the roads are more cramped than before, so the riders have to share the road with cars and even trucks, which more serious.
Error: cramped Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: impotant Suggestion: important
Error: conditon Suggestion: condition
Error: bicycle-related Suggestion: bicycle related
Error: casuse Suggestion: cause
Sentence: In addition, the development of bicylcles should also be taken into considerations.Firstly, the number of bicycle may increase at the same time as the cars, the possbility of bicycle-related accidents will increase with high possiblity.
Error: possbility Suggestion: possibility
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Error: bicylcles Suggestion: bicycles
Sentence: Secondly, the bicycle technology may also evovle in the ten years.
Error: evovle Suggestion: evolve
Sentence: Maybe people ride little bicycle with a low speed, due to the development of bikes especcially bicylce sports, there may be more and more bicycle fans who feel like riding mountain bikes or the road bikes which are much more faster than before.
Error: bicylce Suggestion: bicycle
Error: especcially Suggestion: especially
Sentence: This could also increase the possiblity of the accidents.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: Likewise, with no convincing evidence show the unneccety of wearing the helmets , it is too hasty to let the riders not wear them by the government.
Error: unneccety Suggestion: unnerve
Sentence: In conclusion, the author's recommendation is not well-supported by the evidence in that the reasons show no essential relavance to the conclsuion.
Error: well-supported Suggestion: well supported
Error: conclsuion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: relavance Suggestion: relevance
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 482 350
No. of Characters: 2379 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.686 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.936 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.926 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he author indicates during the ten years , the bicycle-related accidents are incre...
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Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whats
...main cause of bicycle-related accidents.Whats more, the road conditon is another impo...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...main cause of bicycle-related accidents.Whats more, the road conditon is another impo...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...hould also be taken into considerations.Firstly, the number of bicycle may increase at ...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
... bikes or the road bikes which are much more faster than before. This could also increase t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to make the conclusion. Finally, the authors recommendation is not well supported by...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 469, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat no evidence support this conclusion, all the people in the transportation sho...
^^
Line 8, column 80, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...how the unneccety of wearing the helmets , it is too hasty to let the riders not w...
^^
Line 10, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...y the government. In conclusion, the authors recommendation is not well-supported by...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 480.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08541666667 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93665805014 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445833333333 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1440226214 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.05 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174127640459 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059171920447 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705500182942 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964752718368 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705087373914 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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