The following appeared in a health newsletter.
"A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however, suggests that during the same ten-year period, the number of bicycle-related accidents has increased 200 percent. These results demonstrate that bicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result. Thus, to reduce the number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents, the government should concentrate more on educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging or requiring bicyclists to wear helmets."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument concludes that if government will focus more on educating the people about bicycle safety then requiring bicyclists to wear helmets will reduce the number of accidents happening related to bicycle.The evidences cited to support the argument include the information of study report about the percent of bicyclists wearing helmet,another study about number of accidents happening related to bicycle.However,the premises are not strong enough to justify or strengthen the argument.The main reason why the argument are rendered inconclusive are fallacious assumption,problem in the study data and ignorance of other important factors.
Firstly,the argument cities the study data that are inconsistent and weaken the argument.
For instance, there can be less number of bicyclist before ten-years.So may be due to less number of bicyclists there were less accidents happening related to bicycle.Also,the argument fail to give the relationship between two different studies.It may be possible that the because of different data collected by individual studies led to different results.
Secondly,the argument fails to consider the factors that can affect the outcome of the argument in a different way.For instance, it may be possible that the accident happening between a another vehicle and bicycle has been counted in bicycle related accident.Furthermore,the factors and bases on which the study report has been developed cant be derived from the argument.Hence,due to this factors the argument is weak.
Lastly, the argument incorrectly assumes that if government emphasize more on educating people about bicycle safety will led to less number of accidents.Also,argument concludes on basis of study that bicyclist feel safer wearing helmet and hence take more risks that leds to more accidents.It may be possible that accidents happening are because of improper roads build-ed.Hence, the argument is based on faulty assumption.
Hence,the argument conclusion that emphasizing on educating bicyclist rather then wearing helmet is unfounded and weak.the main reasons why the argument seems illogical include the inconsistent study data and incorrect assumptions.However,argument can be strengthen by considering important factor and using more persuasive evidence.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281767955801 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.196132596685 0.15541462614 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0939226519337 0.0836205057962 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0414364640884 0.0520304965353 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00276243093923 0.0272364105082 10% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.116022099448 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0801104972376 0.0416121511921 193% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.66800501495 2.79052419416 131% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0359116022099 0.026700313972 134% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0966850828729 0.113004496875 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0276243093923 0.0255425247493 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0165745856354 0.0127820249294 130% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2282.0 2731.13054187 84% => OK
No of words: 330.0 446.07635468 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.91515151515 6.12365571057 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.466666666667 0.378187486979 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.393939393939 0.287650121315 137% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.290909090909 0.208842608468 139% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.221212121212 0.135150697306 164% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.66800501495 2.79052419416 131% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 207.018472906 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475757575758 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 48.1123875655 52.1807786196 92% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.039408867 30% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 55.0 23.2022227129 237% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 163.277286302 57.7814097925 283% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 380.333333333 141.986410481 268% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.0 23.2022227129 237% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 0.724660767414 322% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 3.58251231527 865% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 94.3939393939 51.9672348444 182% => OK
Elegance: 1.98850574713 1.8405768891 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29145426315 0.441005458295 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.273541670054 0.135418324435 202% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0873406725063 0.0829849096947 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 3.33066907388e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191475516826 0.193483328276 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469125611732 0.0970749176394 48% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328044654573 0.42659136922 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.102889924122 0.0774707102158 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191475516826 0.312017818177 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469125611732 0.0698173142475 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.33743842365 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 0.0 6.46551724138 0% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 14.657635468 41% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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