The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author in his letter to the editor makes an appeal to reduce the number of mopeds rentals in the summer season. The reason for such action mentioned is to reduce the accident noticed in previous days. Though the deeds of the author are inclined towards good thing, he has not considered all possible factors that may affect due to this decision. This makes his advice weak and arise a lot of questions in one's mind.
Firstly, the author tells about the accidents experienced by town involving mopeds and pedestrians. But, before reaching to certain conclusion the author need to answer certains questions. One must know whether only mopeds are responsible for such accidents or are there any alternative possibilities such as under-developed roads, careless pedestrians, some rash drivers, local goons and other. We can't reach at any conclusion before having a proper survey of the accidents.
Further, the author after accusing mopeds for the accidents directly jump to conclusion that need to reduce number of mopeds in summer season when population rises. In this the author keeps a very narrow focus on only accident part and not consider other factors that may affect. One thing is the summer season is responsible to attract the population and moped being the major transport medium will be preferred by them. Reducing its number may cause inconvinience among them and put a bad impression, which may result in decreasing visitors. Less visitors may result in less revenue, degrading lifestyle, reducing popularity. Thus, before making such drastic decision the author may study incidences thoroughly.
Moreover, to prove his point the author uses an example of town Seaville's town and there actions in such situation. Though, giving example proves to be effective while proving the point, but unfair comparison between 2 towns are not acceptable. The other possibilities responsible for reduction in accident in Seaville can be introduction of more efficient means of transport, good roads, careful public, skilled drivers of moped. Thus, need to have an intense meet with council to know actions taken by them to overcome accidents.
Finally, the advice for the author can be to consider all possible scenario and have an detailed survey of the Seaville's actions for controlling accidents. This will help the author to reach to some better advice for the editor rather than reducing usage of mopeds.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1984 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.087 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.399 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.316 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... reduce the number of mopeds rentals in the summer season. The reason for such action mentioned i...
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Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ce weak and arise a lot of questions in ones mind. Firstly, the author tells about ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...rash drivers, local goons and other. We cant reach at any conclusion before having a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...r factors that may affect. One thing is the summer season is responsible to attract the populatio...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun visitors is countable.
Suggestion: Fewer
...hich may result in decreasing visitors. Less visitors may result in less revenue, de...
^^^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...consider all possible scenario and have an detailed survey of the Seavilles action...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19487179487 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69384083332 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541025641026 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9366108586 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119450335036 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417489047645 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542477499344 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068575388379 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435885365895 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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