The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While the growth in moped usage on Balmer Island may increase the possibility of more moped-involved accidents, it is not necessarily effective to limit the number of mopeds in order to reduce these accidents. The policy simply assumes the growth in mopeds is the cause of these accidents and the situation of Balmer Island and it of Seaville are similar. However, these assumptions are rife with holes that make them invalid.
The policy implies that the cause of incidents is because of the increasing use of mopeds and these incidents will decrease by limiting mopeds’ usage. However, the causes of these accidents require our further investigation. It is possible the accidents are not caused by the mopeds, but by the other party involved in them. For example, it could be there are more drunk drivers of cars on the road in the summer who are indulging themselves in summer beach parties, which will make the moped users victims of these accidents. If the use of mopeds are limited, these automobile drivers may be less careful because there will be less mopeds on the road, which, potentially, will result in more accidents. The cause can also be on the pedestrians who suddenly show up on the roads or not obeying the law. What’s more, simply by limiting the amount of moped in use is not enough, and a regulation on the riders’ behavior will also be beneficial.
Building upon the experience of Seaville, the policy believe that impleting the same policy will lead into the same result. On the contrary, there are many factors come into play here. First, this assumption ingnored these are two different places, so their visitors and buisness may be different, which may affect how the policy is implemented. The moped rental owners may be more willing to obey the laws than the ones on Balmer Island. The businesses on Balmer Island may simply negnect this policy facing the temptating fast-growing market. In this case, the policy will be entirely ineffective. Plus, we need to consider the influences that time difference may place. Even though similar policy worked for Seaville last year, we can not say it will have the same effect this year as well. Last year, the demand for mopeds in Seaville maybe small which conincidentally helped improving the situation, which would undermine the influences of this policy. Road condition, geography…. Population…
To conclude, although it may be a good idea to control the amount of mopeds in traffic, its effect on reducing accidents can not be anticipated unless we can somehow provide more tangible evidence that the growth in moped demand is what causes these accidents.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Building upon the experience of Seaville, the policy believe that impleting the same policy will lead into the same result.
Error: impleting Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First, this assumption ingnored these are two different places, so their visitors and buisness may be different, which may affect how the policy is implemented.
Error: ingnored Suggestion: ignored
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
Sentence: The businesses on Balmer Island may simply negnect this policy facing the temptating fast-growing market.
Error: temptating Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: negnect Suggestion: neglect
Sentence: Last year, the demand for mopeds in Seaville maybe small which conincidentally helped improving the situation, which would undermine the influences of this policy.
Error: conincidentally Suggestion: coincidental
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
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May give one more argument.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2137 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.518 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.531 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.434 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun mopeds is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...y be less careful because there will be less mopeds on the road, which, potentially,...
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Line 5, column 881, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to improve' or 'improve'.
Suggestion: to improve; improve
...aybe small which conincidentally helped improving the situation, which would undermine th...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, incidentally, may, so, well, while, for example, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02262443439 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70994640248 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484162895928 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9688414592 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154769882408 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526200367653 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646196246257 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113885001381 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068330623101 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.