The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The topic was about the town council of Balmer island, limit the moped renting from 50 percent to 25 percent to reduce the accidents between pedestrians and mopeds. The following argument is based on unwarranted reasons and flawed for the following reasons.
First of all, the author told that the population increases to the 100,00 during the summer month and the number of accidents involving pedestrian and mopeds. but the author does not provide any actual number of how many accidents happened in the past few months. it would have been possible that pedestrians are responsible for the accidents and they are on the way of mopeds. The city council could have solved this problem without curtailing the renting, by providing a different lane for mopeds and a different pedestrian lane.
The author provided another claimed that by limit the moped renting there will be a reduction on accidents and all these theories based on neighboring island Seaville offer similar limits on mopeds rentals. but it would have been possible that the Seaville island provided an alternative mode of transportations or maybe mopeds are not important transportation for Seaville island. Since there is no actual evidence that the action would have a similar effect on Balmer island the limiting the rentals on mopeds would be a burden on peoples.
The author also told that he would limit the moped renting per day from 50 percent to 25 percent. The author does not tell any other transportation would be introduced for the peoples, as the mopeds are a popular mode of transportations. it would be insensitive to think that people walked all the way. Besides, the mopeds are important and many people earn money through the rental business and cut the renting percentages would have a burden to the rental company and they would face a loss.
The following argument based on unwarranted reasons and failed to provide any pragmatic data the convince that by reducing the rentals of mopeds the accidents would be reduced. The city council first introduce alternative transportation and other systems to mitigate the inconveniences of the people that would have caused by reducing the number of mopeds.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1802 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.992 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.905 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...idents involving pedestrian and mopeds. but the author does not provide any actual ...
^^^
Line 2, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...idents happened in the past few months. it would have been possible that pedestria...
^^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...offer similar limits on mopeds rentals. but it would have been possible that the Se...
^^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ant transportation for Seaville island. Since there is no actual evidence that the ac...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 238, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... are a popular mode of transportations. it would be insensitive to think that peop...
^^
Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nd failed to provide any pragmatic data the convince that by reducing the rentals of mopeds ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aused by reducing the number of mopeds.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08033240997 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73187780841 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437673130194 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9213671554 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.266666667 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191127179433 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723052753736 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528895435549 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118598913612 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471093952521 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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