The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The town of Balmer may benefit from the policy of putting restrictions on renting mopeds to reduce the accidents of mopeds and pedestrians, however the author fails to give a cogent argument to support the usefulness of the policy for Balmer. The author adduces to the same policy that were seemingly worked in the neighboring island of Seaville. However, there are several vague points in the argument, each raises questions needed to be addressed by the author.
First, is it enough just to regulate the renting of mopes during summer? The author should ask. Although it is in summer that population rises to 100,000, the rise might not be significant. As there is no evidence about the constant population of the Balmer town, the rise might be only an insignificant fraction, take 0.000001 percent of the population for instance, which is not considerable at all. Then, the body of the population would mostly consist natives, and it casts doubts on the argument: First, the summer time might not be the crucial time that accidents happen, and secondly, the people might have bought the mopeds instead of temporary renting mopeds. If these are the case the author’s conclusion would be a fallacy.
Secondly, the author needs to ask whether there was any alternative policy taken by Seaville to reduce the accident rates or it was exclusively the restriction on renting mopeds reducing the accident rates. As evidences are absent from the argument, it is possible that Seaville has taken parallel strategies and the reduction in accidents is chiefly due to the complementary strategies rather than just restrictions on renting mopeds. If this is the case, then Seaville experience cannot suffice to be supportive of the author's argument.
Finally, even if Seaville’s drastic results are only because of restriction on renting mopeds, the situation in Balmer may differ from Seaville. Then, is the policy also viable for the Balmer city? It is possible that the accidents happen because of the unmentioned defects of Balmer’s roads. The infrastructures might not be standard: there might be many potholes in the road, the lighting system may not work properly. Furthermore, is it enough to just restrict the renting companies? The numbers of renting companies might be so high in Balmer that even with reducing the renting mopeds we may still not see any notable decrease in the numbers of driving mopeds in the town. If these are the case, then the source of accidents remains intact with or without the restrictions on renting mopeds.
In short, as discussed, the argument is replete with many vague points defying any certain evaluation. Therefore, the conclusion resting on such an inconclusive argument cannot be tenable.
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Comments
what do you suggest for three
what do you suggest for three arguments?
suggested: 1. The accidents
suggested:
1. The accidents may be not because of mopeds.
2. 'the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day' doesn't mean ' the 50 percent annual reduction'. maybe 30% reduction. People may buy mopeds for example.
3. It works in A, doesn't mean it will work in B
argument 1 -- well, don't bring everything which is good for your arguments.
The writer points out the fact that the population of the island increases by 100,000 during summer. How does this relate to the number of accidents in Balmer Island during the same period? Maybe the accidents didn't increase. (doesn't matter people are natives or foreigners)
argument 2 and argument 3 are relatively duplicated. One argument is enough for the difference of two islands.
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