The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
While the letter from Central Plaza owner stating the reason for in decreasing the number of shopper and accusing the popularity of skateboard as the main culprit, it does not seem appropriate for the flowing.
First of all, he has stated that the number of their shoppers has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboard has increased dramatically. This statement is not reasonable at all because he has not mentioned any kind of study or survey that is plausible in showing the real picture. Weather this decreasing is significant or he is just starting this to attract more shoppers to their Plaza is unclear. How increased popularity is decreasing the number of shopper is also not mentioned. Perhaps the shopper is going to another mall to purchase where they can avail their requirement within their capabilities. Shopper may avoid the plaza due to traffic rush on the way to the Plaza. If these are true, then the statement of the Plaza owner is seriously faulty and the decrease in not the result of mere popularity of skateboarding.
Beside faulting the increased popularity of skateboarding the owner is also claiming that skateboarding is also behind the incensement on the amount of liiter and vandalism thought of the plaza. Is there any specific proof for this claim? Are the police and investigation department also agreed with the owner? If it is not so, then the owner cannot recommend the prohibition of skateboarding. It may happen that the city’s defence system is being weakened and the law enforcement is not working and there may possibility of the absence of strict law against litter dropping. It may also be the scenario that the owner is pointing the crime and illicit act just to persuade the authority just for his own interest. He may even have exaggerated about those happening.
Even the city officials heed the plaza owner and prohibit the skateboarding in the city, the assumption and optimism of the sanguine owner that the city prohibition of skateboarding may rectum their business to previous level doesn’t have any standpoint. Prohibition may create negative assumption among the skateboarder and general people also about the plaza owner and they may decrease their shopping from that plaza again. People may be no longer interested about the plaza and they are not actually liking the behaviour and service of that plaza. If this happen then the prohibition of skateboarding never bring them any benefit.
However, the plaza owner statement might be true but he has to find more plausible reason for decreasing the number of shopper and also has to make the city official convinced about the skateboarding role with realistic investigation and survey otherwise he will not be able to achieve his goal.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2270 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.956 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.751 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.85 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.329 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 552, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he behaviour and service of that plaza. If this happen then the prohibition of ska...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, while, as to, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05689277899 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84594987467 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44420131291 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4896174977 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.55 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284129047755 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937600966531 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886982132992 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180958801916 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905474841227 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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