The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues. “Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land will inevitably result in pollution and, since West Fredonia is the home of several endangered animal species, in environmental disaster. But such disasters can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC’s copper unless the company abandons its mining plans.
The writer of this analytical piece has drawn an optimistic conclusion, from disjointed and incomplete data, that environmental disaster can be prevented if consumers refused to purchase the products of the Crust Copper Company(CCC). In support of his position, the writer claims that pollution is inevitable once the CCC company will start mining at West Fredonia. He also mentioned that West Fredonia is the home of several endangered animal species. At first glance, the writer's conclusion seems plausible, but in the depth analysis reveals certain logical fallacies.
At first, the major lacuna in the given argument is that the writer assumes that the CCC company purchased 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical West Fredonia for copper mining. The CCC company likely purchased the land for any other purpose rather than copper mining. It might be that the CCC company purchased the land for investment purposes. Also, the writer does not mention about the statistical data regarding the copper reserve at the West Fredonia. It might be that there is no copper in the land. Therefore, it's unreasonable to conclude that the CCC company will do the copper mining and harms the environment.
Furthermore, even if we assume that the CCC company will mine the copper at West Fredonia it does not support the writer's assertion that it will lead to ineluctable pollution. Because the writer does not provide any past data related to copper mining and pollution about CCC company. At the same time, the CCC company may practice the best pollution control policy in the market. Maybe the government already analyzed the possible outcome and after evaluating everything related to the pollution they allowed the CCC company to purchased land at West Fredonia. Also, the writer does not provide any information related to other copper mining company's efficiency in maintaining pollution. The CCC may be the only company that can control and maintain the pollution under the desired range. Hence, the writer's claim that pollution is inevitable falls apart if the CCC can control the pollution.
Another gap in the argument is that the writer unfairly assumes that endangered animal species live at the same place where the CCC company purchased the land. Likely, the CCC company's land is far away from the living place of endangered species. Moreover, the writer doesn't mention the total tropical land at West Fredonia. Maybe a 10,000 square miles is negligible compared to the total tropical land at West Fredonia. Consequently, there may be enough space for the animal species even if the CCC company operates in that area. Given the above, advice given by the writer seems extremely unreasonable.
All things considering, it may be said that the writer is failed to provide convincing arguments because of the complete absence of the evidence needed to prove his assumption. The argument might have been more comprehensive if the writer presents more information about past pollution data of the CCC company and total land at West Fredonia. Moreover, there is a requirement of the evidence that can prove that pollution is ineluctable by the CCC company. But no convincing reasoning is given. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion based on wishy-washy observations that are likely to be incorrect.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 540 350
No. of Characters: 2746 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.821 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.085 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.628 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.723 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.607 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ed animal species. At first glance, the writers conclusion seems plausible, but in the ...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...t West Fredonia it does not support the writers assertion that it will lead to inelucta...
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Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ndangered species. Moreover, the writer doesnt mention the total tropical land at West...
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Line 9, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ations that are likely to be incorrect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 539.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19851576994 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70560346309 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.402597402597 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 884.7 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7252991495 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.071428571 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39285714286 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329238538202 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11065066254 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859943381058 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21376449421 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104417344292 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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