The letter indicates that the investment on the Parson Cities’ Education is nearly twice as Blue City, so the author makes the conclusion that the residents in Parson City empasize more on education.Given the fact above, there are still some factors problematic and let’s evaluate them carefully.
First of all, the author doesn’t show us the reason why the Parson city could put more money on ecucation. Given by the two timeIn this letter, the authors of money, there is nothing more specific explanations for this difference. So we can not make the conclusion that the residents in the Parson City place a higher value on education. Maybe the income of the residents of Parson City are much higher than the residents in Blue City, hence the there are more tax collcted from them to invest the city, including education.On the other hand, even we go on with this suppose that the residents in Blue City got less money from work, which brought less tax for the Government. We also can not make the conclusion that the residents in Blue City do not take care of their education by the lower fund from tax to invest.
Maybe the poor families who want make a better life, would turn to education which make their students study harder than other area to get a better future.
Secondly, the author do not tell us the education conditions of the two cities.In that the author just mentions the public education which funded by the tax, this would make another reason possible- the private education. Because private educations mainly do not collect money from taxpyers, as the result may be opposite, there are more and more students in Blue City studying in private schools which may offer better classes. Thus alos means the local residents are focusing on the education.
So the author should make a wide suvery of the two cities to find out the education condition clearly.
Thirdly,the author do not show us the specific use of the investment on education both of the two cities. Merely with the sum of money ,we can not find out there the money was spent. Maybe because of the old infrastructures, the Parson City put the monet on the rebuiding and constrcutions.While the Blue City put all the money to hire more expericence teachers, which means diffrerently in the result.
In conclusion, the author does not show us the relevance between the investment by the governments and focusing on education of the two citie’s residents, the author should make a wide survey to make it clear.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8785046729 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69843528254 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432242990654 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7799174309 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.2 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 5.70786347227 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234487363143 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893814414493 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534756417093 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118511775767 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585988659937 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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