In this letter, the author recommmended thah people should take Ichthaid to prevent cold the main reason for absenteeism in shools ans workplaces. Referring to some evidence from the residents living nearby East Meria who often eat fish, the author conclude the nutrient in the fish oil called Ichthcaid could help peolple to keep away from cold. While there are still some loopholes in this letter, let's evaluate them carefully.
To begin wih, the study that the author mentions in East Meria show the effect of eating fish in not convincing. First of all, the locations may indicate different results as the author want to show this report to the West Meria Publice Health Council.We do not know the distance with the two places, there maybe other variances in the two places like the people's diet and the climate which may bring about no good effect. Secondly, the author doesn't show us how many people in the East Meria was surveyed by the researchers. Maybe few people living in that place catch cold by the clement weather.
What's more, the author does not show us the proof that eating fish is effective for preventing cold. He should make some survey or research to prove this effect instead of providing us an untested conclusion. Meanwhile, There is no evidence to prove the Ichthaid is the effective ingridients for preventing from cold. The author merely recommondates that the fish oil which is full of Ichthaid can help people to protect themselves from getting cold without any other proof. Even if eating fish is good for people's health, while there maybe other ingridients which works instead of Ichtchaid. Let alone the fish's effect is in question.
Finally, the author's target that reduducing absenteeism in schools and workplace is not relevant with these evidence. The author tells us that the main reason of people's absenteeism is getting cold. While there maybe just an excuse for some of the people who do not want to go to school or work. I suggests the author should find hou how many people in the West Meria got cold duriing a certain time and then to make a more convincing conclusion.
In conclusion, I fully comprehend the author's concern, but the author's evidence that eating fish especially fish oil to prevent cold is not convincing. He should take an ehxaustive survey both in East asn West Meria and find out the real effective ingridients if it really exists. More over, he should find other way to reduce the absenteeism of people as it is not convincing for us that taking pills can do this job.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: I suggests the author should find hou how many people in the West Meria got cold duriing a certain time and then to make a more convincing conclusion.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to I and suggests
Sentence: In this letter, the author recommmended thah people should take Ichthaid to prevent cold the main reason for absenteeism in shools ans workplaces.
Error: shools Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: recommmended Suggestion: recommended
Error: ans Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: thah Suggestion: than
Sentence: Referring to some evidence from the residents living nearby East Meria who often eat fish, the author conclude the nutrient in the fish oil called Ichthcaid could help peolple to keep away from cold.
Error: peolple Suggestion: people
Sentence: To begin wih, the study that the author mentions in East Meria show the effect of eating fish in not convincing.
Error: wih Suggestion: with
Sentence: Meanwhile, There is no evidence to prove the Ichthaid is the effective ingridients for preventing from cold.
Error: ingridients Suggestion: ingredients
Sentence: The author merely recommondates that the fish oil which is full of Ichthaid can help people to protect themselves from getting cold without any other proof.
Error: recommondates Suggestion: recommended
Sentence: Even if eating fish is good for people's health, while there maybe other ingridients which works instead of Ichtchaid.
Error: ingridients Suggestion: ingredients
Sentence: Finally, the author's target that reduducing absenteeism in schools and workplace is not relevant with these evidence.
Error: workplace Suggestion: workspace
Error: reduducing Suggestion: reducing
Sentence: I suggests the author should find hou how many people in the West Meria got cold duriing a certain time and then to make a more convincing conclusion.
Error: hou Suggestion: how
Error: duriing Suggestion: during
Sentence: He should take an ehxaustive survey both in East asn West Meria and find out the real effective ingridients if it really exists.
Error: ingridients Suggestion: ingredients
Error: asn Suggestion: an
Error: ehxaustive Suggestion: exhaustive
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2068 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.711 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.395 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.765 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: We
...o the West Meria Publice Health Council.We do not know the distance with the two p...
^^
Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ut no good effect. Secondly, the author doesnt show us how many people in the East Mer...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...e catch cold by the clement weather. Whats more, the author does not show us the p...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 237, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...d. While there maybe just an excuse for some of the people who do not want to go to school ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'suggest'
Suggestion: suggest
... do not want to go to school or work. I suggests the author should find hou how many peo...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83295194508 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46069809412 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45995423341 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1566939537 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0937513543819 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318354274772 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298229405336 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0627649241344 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277947262799 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.