The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 per cent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream — a dairy product made from milk — at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
As mentioned in the industry analysts report, the number of dairy forms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent. It indicates that there has been increase in the competitiveness between farm diary producers. This rise in the contest among the producers would have naturally led to the implementation of highly efficient methods which will reduce the production cost. These transformations are well documented as given.
Thus the use of new machinery became prevalent which will reduce the milking time. Since the amount of labour for producing a particular quantity of milk is considerably reduced, the labour cost is also likely to decrease. All these may pose a scenario that the overall production cost of diary products has to go down which in turn should descend the consumer price of diary products.
On discussing this issue, one must keep in mind that labour cost and production period is not the only factor that makes up the production cost. As explained earlier, in the industry, which is gaining its competitiveness, the need for investing in machineries that generate high efficiency is becoming quotidian. The capital on the machineries will be vented out in no other than the consumer price.
The advancement of the diary industry, mandates us to take into account an other significant feature which is storage and preservation. With the onset of shift from a mere household manufacturing to a more organisational sector, the act of preservation and storage comes into play which will give rise to ware house costs. The retail price of any goods is effected by the distribution system whether it reaches the consumers directly or through dealers. If through dealers, how may has it passed before going to the hands of the users are all the major contributors for product rate.
Above all, the last but not the least factor is national economic scenario. This includes the inflation rate of the denominations, the government policies such as taxing system and the fuel price. These directly or indirectly bestows a greater impact on the consumer costs. As a result, this industry approaching its apex has a higher chance of getting the price of its products to go up rather than coming down. Neglecting all these parameters and arriving at a conclusion that farmers on their avariciousness are selling their product in a higher price than actually necessary to make them is an erroneous one. Moreover, it is very much realisable that the producers always opt for the lowest selling price possible to please their customers and at the same time leaving their profit intact
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2122 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.97 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.872 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...mations are well documented as given. Thus the use of new machinery became prevale...
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Line 4, column 3, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... consumer price of diary products. On discussing this issue, one must keep in ...
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Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...ustry, mandates us to take into account an other significant feature which is storage an...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, as to, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07728337237 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88099423654 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564402810304 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9861225927 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.081907328221 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.02963138551 0.0743258471296 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690787527787 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524088171398 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618875348965 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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