The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville
High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have
involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have
complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other
instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although
there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford
to pay for driving instruction. Therefore, an effective and mandatory program
sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of
the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions
and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove
unwarranted.
As an analysis of the argument presented by the school board of CenterVIlle, there are a certain things i would like to elicit so that we can come up with a more learned solution for the teenage driving problem in CenterVille and also highlight the flaws and ammendments we can make in the current argument.
Firstly we do not know the exact impact of the accidents due to teenage driving and further how many of those drivers have actually atteneded a driving school. There might be a case where most of these drivers are already learned but yet made a mistake due to bad junctions, traffic rules and the delapidated road conditions. We can also argue that the license issuing offices can be more stricter so as to screen out the bad drivers. Also teens without any licenses can be given much harsher penalties which might instill fear in their minds and refrain them from driving vehicle without license.
Secondly there might be a case that the number of teenage driver is in itself very less and thus making this a compulsory programme might forced parents to actually buy a car for their kids. We need better number analysis so as to make such a programme compulsory in the school. Less numbers also highlight that most of the teenagers are interested in driving itself.
Thirdly there is no guarentee that even after getting proper lessons for driving a teenager is not bound to make a mistake, there might be a case where more of these hot blooded folks are driving and the cases of such ccidents might increase. We can provide cheaper driving classes which are open for all the kids who are interested.
Further the use of the word only solution also might be questionable as there can be many other ways such as restrict the age of driving itself to 20 and hence the teenagers shall not be allowed to drive. We can come up with more such solutions.
Lastly the term safe drivers is very vague. At what point of instruction can you confirm that a driver is safe. There has to be more of a criteria so as to determine the skill level in driving.
Thus with the above arguments I would like to bring in the light the flaws and the potential assumptions in the above arguments and also some ammendments which can make it better.
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure t 83
- College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain y 66
- Students should always question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing an 66
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure t 83
- Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain y 66
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...ard of CenterVIlle, there are a certain things i would like to elicit so that we can c...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...CenterVIlle, there are a certain things i would like to elicit so that we can com...
^
Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stricter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stricter
...that the license issuing offices can be more stricter so as to screen out the bad drivers. Al...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...se issuing offices can be more stricter so as to screen out the bad drivers. Also teens ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...er so as to screen out the bad drivers. Also teens without any licenses can be given...
^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ir kids. We need better number analysis so as to make such a programme compulsory in the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun numbers is countable.
Suggestion: Fewer
...h a programme compulsory in the school. Less numbers also highlight that most of the...
^^^^
Line 6, column 136, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
...driver is safe. There has to be more of a criteria so as to determine the skill level in d...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 147, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...afe. There has to be more of a criteria so as to determine the skill level in driving. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... determine the skill level in driving. Thus with the above arguments I would like t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, lastly, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59102244389 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43570056346 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9241900881 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0625 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0949140680343 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034853959079 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280890853732 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0486276597077 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290665482306 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...ard of CenterVIlle, there are a certain things i would like to elicit so that we can c...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...CenterVIlle, there are a certain things i would like to elicit so that we can com...
^
Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stricter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stricter
...that the license issuing offices can be more stricter so as to screen out the bad drivers. Al...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...se issuing offices can be more stricter so as to screen out the bad drivers. Also teens ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...er so as to screen out the bad drivers. Also teens without any licenses can be given...
^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ir kids. We need better number analysis so as to make such a programme compulsory in the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun numbers is countable.
Suggestion: Fewer
...h a programme compulsory in the school. Less numbers also highlight that most of the...
^^^^
Line 6, column 136, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
...driver is safe. There has to be more of a criteria so as to determine the skill level in d...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 147, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...afe. There has to be more of a criteria so as to determine the skill level in driving. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... determine the skill level in driving. Thus with the above arguments I would like t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, lastly, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59102244389 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43570056346 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9241900881 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0625 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0949140680343 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034853959079 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280890853732 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0486276597077 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290665482306 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.