The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The school boards letter concludes that there has to be a mandatory drivers ed class in the high school due to the increase in teenage car accidents in the last 2 years. The school boards argument supposes that this type of class is highly beneficial because it will help parents who have busy schedules that are not able to adequately teach their children how to drive, as well as will aid in the lack of financial resources that families experience with these drivers ed classes. However, the school boards argument is unreliable because it assumes that Centerville Highschool is the only feasible location for a drivers ed class as well as falsely concludes that having a school sponsored mandatory drivers ed class will alleviate the financial burden that drivers ed classes have put on families.
The school board incorrectly assumes that the only feasible location for have a drivers ed class is at Centerville high. Instead, the school board should be asking the question if school has to be the only option for these individuals to take the class? There are many students who are not able to drive and do not want to drive due to cultural and personal beliefs. By the school making these teenagers take this required course would be a wrongdoing in their part. Highschool should be an environment where students feel comfortable learning and taking classes that will solely benefit their individuals goals and belief system. If driving is not want of their goals or beliefs then the school needs to be considering other locations for this type of drivers ed class.
Additionally, the school board incorrectly presumes that having a school sponsored required drivers ed class will help parents who cannot afford to pay for drivers ed. Instead, school needs to be calculating and asking the question on how many families cannot actually afford drivers ed? Instead of making everyone take this drivers ed class, especially the individuals who can readily afford drivers ed outside of school, the school should be looking at different ways to offer the families who need it most some financial assistance. By doing this they can take care of the families who need the most help with affording these programs so they can take drivers ed in the location of their choosing.
Overall, the school boards argument can be improved by asking these types of questions and gathering feedback. The answers to these questions would help evaluate the efficacy pf this program while considering alternatives towards the implementation of a drivers ed class in the school curriculum.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 2119 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.951 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.788 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.436 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'asking' instead.
Suggestion: asking
...gh. Instead, the school board should be asking the question if school has to be the only option for...
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Line 3, column 772, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions for this type of drivers ed class. Additionally, the school board incorrect...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'asking' instead.
Suggestion: asking
...ead, school needs to be calculating and asking the question on how many families cannot actually af...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d class in the school curriculum.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, look, so, then, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05140186916 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63157971737 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418224299065 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1035683767 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.133333333 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26628197734 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13109244962 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693804988382 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185726887709 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516180846417 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.