The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil.
"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The writer recommended an investment in consolidated industries with a major business of selling home oils. these oils are used for a fuel for heating because most homes in the northeastern United states are very cold for 90 days if seen from the last heating season and this pattern will continue to for several years according to the climate forecasters cited in the text . by analyzing it, it can be seen that the argument of the writer in this case have 3 major flaws.
First of all, the author stated they traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. this statement is ambiguous because of the word traditional. are they still using oil for heating as of today? that question will suddenly pop out in ones head after seeing that sentence. if the people living there no longer uses oil nowadays, then the recommendation made by the writer might be invalid.
Second, by any chance the people living there still uses oil to heat up during cold seasons. why not propose a new concept of heating which is more cost effective such as using electricity? this is another question that is to see if the writer take account of how cost effective this concept is. While oil is a natural resource that could take decades to form. electricity, on the other hand, can be created by watermills, windmills and solar panels. although electricity requires some initial investment for devices, the writer cited that the climate forecasters predict that the weather pattern will continue for several more years. therefore, based on the conditions mentioned in the text, electricity should be more efficient and cost less.
Additionally, the writer also mentioned that many new homes will be built because the increase in population in that area. Since these homes are yet to be built, why not instead discuss how to built these new houses using architecture or civil engineering to prevent heat loss inside these houses? building it in such a way so that the inside could still be warm although the outside is cold, or at least find a way to mitigate the effect of the cold weather inside the house.
To conclude, the recommendation made by the author is not really suited to the condition stated by him/herself. As of now, the arguments are not valid due to the lack of consideration and information. therefore, a request for revising the proposal should be made and will be discussed later.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.71 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.584 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.238 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.794 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
... a major business of selling home oils. these oils are used for a fuel for heating be...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he climate forecasters cited in the text . by analyzing it, it can be seen that th...
^^
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...climate forecasters cited in the text . by analyzing it, it can be seen that the a...
^^
Line 4, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ed oil as their major fuel for heating. this statement is ambiguous because of the w...
^^^^
Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...iguous because of the word traditional. are they still using oil for heating as of ...
^^^
Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...till using oil for heating as of today? that question will suddenly pop out in ones ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 244, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... that question will suddenly pop out in ones head after seeing that sentence. if the...
^^^^
Line 4, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...n ones head after seeing that sentence. if the people living there no longer uses ...
^^
Line 7, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Why
...ses oil to heat up during cold seasons. why not propose a new concept of heating wh...
^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...st effective such as using electricity? this is another question that is to see if t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of how cost effective this concept is. While oil is a natural resource that could ta...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 362, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Electricity
...source that could take decades to form. electricity, on the other hand, can be created by w...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 452, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...watermills, windmills and solar panels. although electricity requires some initial inves...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 636, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...n will continue for several more years. therefore, based on the conditions mentioned in t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 299, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Building
... prevent heat loss inside these houses? building it in such a way so that the inside cou...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 202, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... lack of consideration and information. therefore, a request for revising the proposal sh...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, at least, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87317073171 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67866968487 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509756097561 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.102973849 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1428571429 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240961581996 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708059490154 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895918231184 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140944940222 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960563796262 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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