The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College."To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based o

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The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

While the proposal and the argument made in the recent memo by the director of student housing at Buckingham college for building new dormitories sounds very promising and optimistic, there are three assumptions that need to be addressed and evaluated before making a rash decision because not everything goes as what we hope or plan to go.

The first assumption that needs to be looked at is the current trend of increasing enrollment at the college. even if this trend continues and the enrollments double over the next 50 years as the director predicts, if the number of students graduating are decreasing and the number of students leaving the college are increasing either via transfer to another school or expulsion due to failing grades, then building new dormitories may be a risky decision because the number of students actually attending college will not change much and the college will lose money with many vacancies in their dormitories.

The second assumption that needs to be considered is the increasing rent for the apartments in off-campus housing. there must be a reason why the average rent for the apartments in town is rising. For instance, if there is gentrification underway in this town and if this is part of the reason for the increasing trend of enrollments, then even after the new dormitories are built, students may still prefer to live off-campus despite the rising rent price.

The third assumption that the director should examine is whether new dormitories would be attractive enough to make prospective students more likely to enroll at the Buckingham college. A simple poll or survey of current student body might show if they prefer to live in the new dormitories or off-campus housing and a qualitative analysis of reasons why may show whether they would keep their current opinions.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, third, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 302.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06953642384 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80180392935 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496688741722 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.157288684 57.8364921388 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 191.375 119.503703932 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.75 23.324526521 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 5.70786347227 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241154114507 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105006291437 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832433926287 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152700687494 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739976829371 0.0628817314937 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 14.3799401198 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.3550499002 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1505 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.511 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.46 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.776 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5