The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Argument claims that building new dormitories would make students more likely to enroll at Buckingham college.The conclusion of the argument relies on many assumptions such as
new dormitories would attract students is one of them.But there is no strong evidence provided by auhtor which weakens the given argument.
Firstly , author claims that to serve housing needs of students , there is need of new dormitories. But author has not clearly mentioned that what is number of students living in dormitories
and no of dormitories present to accomodate these students. As there are possibilities that there could be enough dormitories or number of students could be less than number of dormitories present in college.
Hence this is vague terminology to assume that buckingham college needs more new dormitories.
Secondly, author readily assumes that as Buckingham's enrollment is growing , dormitory space will be inadequate.This statement is unconvinced as strong rendering is not provided by author.
For example, In argument author hasnt mentioned last years enrollement count.If it is already less than no of dormitories then increasing no of enrollments will not affects on service
provided in existing dormitries as long as they are adequate. Also author has assumed that based on current trends, buckingham's enrollement will be guranteedly double overy next fifty years.
What current trends he observed are not clearly mentioned with any evidence.If author has provided this information then readers would have convinced to this argument.
Furthermore, he states that average rent of apartment in town has risen hence students will find difficult to afford off-campus housing.This is very weak ans unsupported claim.
Here author has assumed many things such as students will only rent apartment in town.They may find place outside of town at affordable price.Also there could be chances that rent
of apartment in town is actually less than dormitories.
In conclusion, author states that new dormitories would attract enrollement at college. But there is no relation between new dormitories and students enrolling at buckingham's college.
This argument would be more strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant factors of new dormitories pushing students to get into buckingham's college.Without this information
, the argument remain unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1993 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.372 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.916 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.893 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 15 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... likely to enroll at Buckingham college.The conclusion of the argument relies on ma...
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... mentioned last years enrollement count.If it is already less than no of dormitori...
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...n increasing no of enrollments will not affects on service provided in existing dorm...
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Line 17, column 166, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...n increasing no of enrollments will not affects on service provided in existing dorm...
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...hams college.Without this information , the argument remain unsubstantiated and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7320441989 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08766501367 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486187845304 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2115556671 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.214285714 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 5.70786347227 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 5.15768463074 291% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 31.0 5.25449101796 590% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233712379796 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111024077499 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828201179682 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928453839449 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797754321995 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.5979740519 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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