The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author has presented his reasons as to why he suggests that Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories and although the reasons may be considered valid but they are flawed because of a number of reasons and gives rise to numerous doubts which makes the proposotion the the author is putting forward that much less compelling. The following are the points that make the authors proposition suceptible to failing.
Firstly, the author points out that Buckingham College's enrollment is growing and based on the current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making the existing dormitory space inadequate. But the question to ask here is whether the current dormitory space available being fully occupied by the students. It may be true that the enrollment will double in the next 50 years, but the students might not prefer living on campus in the next 50 years just as they might not prefer it right now. This could be because of a number of reasons like the cost of the dormitories being higher than the cost of renting a shared apartment or simply even the independence it gives the students when they live on their own. Since it is not clear if the students currently prefer living in the dormitories or not and if they don't then spending resources on building a number of new dormitories may not prove fruitful.
Secondly, the auhtor states that the average rent for an apartment in the town has risen in recent years and consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. But what the author fails to look at is that if the reason behind the rise in the appartment rent is because more and more students have started living off campus. The author doesn't state anywhere in the proposition the comparision between the cost of living in a rented apartment and that of living in a dormitory. There may be a major difference between the two and since college is generally expensive for most of the people, the students might prefer the less expensive option which leds to the increase in the appartment rent. And this may not be the only reason for the apartment rent increase. And it can be possible that with the increased number of students in the area, more appartment complexes might be created in the area which will provide the students with better accomodation and they might not prefer living in the dormitory at all.
Apart from this, the author says that attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham College. But there is no guarantee that this might happen. If the author stated this on the basis some kind of statistic or survey in which attractive new dormitories was a preference of students of higher importance than other factors then the constructions of new dormitories might attract students to enroll at Buckingham College.
Therefore the proposition that the author put forward to suggest construction of new dormitories at Buckingham College are fallacious and without more solid evidence, the argument is not very compelling.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 520 350
No. of Characters: 2520 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.775 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 287, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Line 2, column 287, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...rous doubts which makes the proposotion the the author is putting forward that much les...
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Line 2, column 331, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun compelling is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...the author is putting forward that much less compelling. The following are the point...
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Line 4, column 820, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...g in the dormitories or not and if they dont then spending resources on building a n...
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Line 6, column 374, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e started living off campus. The author doesnt state anywhere in the proposition the c...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...nts to enroll at Buckingham College. Therefore the proposition that the author put for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, apart from, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 518.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94980694981 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69428916574 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.9806819014 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.823529412 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4705882353 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265253175316 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932883564055 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775443125213 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169893436319 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499397942845 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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