Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
I disagree with the statement that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. The reason for my stance on the topic can be elucidated by the following points.
I believe that formal education gives us an opportunity to a structured education. This structure has been developed by experienced professionals and they are meant for the ease and benefit for every individual. Formal education brings in a certain discipline to the chaotic knowledge that we will be gaining as we grow up. Formal education trains our mind to think in a systematic manner because we have been taught to do so since childhood. This aids in arriving at various decisions that we will later take in life not to be whimsical but to be well pondered over.
Moreover, a formal education provides a well balanced knowledge for various fields of life. This makes us more aware of what is happening in the world. It gives us a lot of exposure to the various fields and thus helps us to draw from this knowledge and make us well equipped to make well informed decisions. It helps us in dealing with various kinds of decisions that we will be taking in our lives.
On the other hand, I do have to agree that although formal education is a structured one, it may sometimes end up in restraining the thought process of an individual as sometimes we find it difficult to break free form the pattern of thinking and doing things that we are used to. Formal education, because of being disciplined, may sometimes end up in restricting the mind to wander and discovering things on it's own. It can sadly, end up thwarting the imagination process of an individual. Just like a simple mathematics problem. As long as all the mathematical rules are followed, there can be more than one way to arrive at the solution and this is not going to be taught to us, we are supposed to discover the alternate solution to the one that we have been taught on our own. Similarly in life also we need to let our mind to wander and to be free sometimes when we need to arrive at a decision that will affect our life.
That being said, I do feel that sometimes formal education can restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free but more often than not it equips us in dealing with the problems in our life in a better way. So I disagree with the author's statement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 367, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a systematic manner" with adverb for "systematic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rmal education trains our mind to think in a systematic manner because we have been taught to do so si...
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Line 6, column 39, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'well balanced knowledge'.
Suggestion: well balanced knowledge
... Moreover, a formal education provides a well balanced knowledge for various fields of life. This makes ...
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Line 8, column 783, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...ne that we have been taught on our own. Similarly in life also we need to let our mind to...
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Line 10, column 239, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...in a better way. So I disagree with the authors statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, thus, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55503512881 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63051769017 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447306791569 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5981584778 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.368421053 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19688936561 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795800946621 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108330803186 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173643528494 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126252491129 0.0667264976115 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.