Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education in one's life is very important. This helps a person to evolve as a person and also gives us ample amounts of knowledge. Some people think the present formal education tends people to limit the knowledge and cannot achieve what they want. I strongly disagree with this for the following reasons.
First of all, the education system, makes us explore a variety of fields in which we might discover our interests. Many children will not know what their interests are as a child and being explored to multiple fields and subjects, gets them to understand their interests. For example, the great Indian musician Ambi Subramanyam, wasn't much interested in academics but he discovered the love for music by attending many music after classes in his school. From the above example we can see that, he wouldn't have taken music as his profession if he wasn't exposed to music in his school time. This formal education system helped him to find his interests and also live the life with all his heart put into what he loves. The new system of after classes concept developed by the education system can help people gain more knowledge in the subject.
Moreover, there is no reason for anyone to feel restrained from the education one gets in the country. If one has more interested in any other field or wants to know and explore more in what they like, there are plethora websites and information available online and can learn about the topics. There are multiple videos which are created by experts on YouTube which one can watch to understand and gain more knowledge in that particular field. For example, I was keen interested in the AI after studying a subject in my engineering. Though the syllabus content were limited, I explored the subject by reading more about it and developing projects by myself. The knowledge we tend to receive from education can always be the first step to many more to come and can never be restrain our minds.
To sum up everything that I have stated above, education is a very important part of one's life but this can never restrain anyone's minds and spirits in any way. This always acts as a former direction which is shown to kids as they are young which can be molded later on in their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7193877551 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43422425633 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7691166542 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13818622236 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491755680829 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337036251668 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909903198422 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126645143022 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.