The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of Brindleburg to the city council.
"Two years ago, the town of Seaside Vista opened a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Since then, the Seaside Vista Tourism Board has reported a 20% increase in visitors. In addition, local banks reported a steep rise in the number of new business loan applications they received this year. The amount of tax money collected by Seaside Vista has also increased, allowing the town to announce plans to improve Seaside Vista's roads and bridges. We recommend building a similar golf course and resort hotel in Brindleburg. We predict that this project will generate additional tax revenue that the city can use to fund much-needed public improvements."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In a memo from the mayor of Brindleburg to the council, it was predicted that building a similar golf course and resort hotel like that in the town of Seaside Vista would generate additional tax revenue that can be used by the city to fund essential public improvements. This recommendation and prediction were based on the increment of the visitors reported by the Seaside Vista Tourist Board as well as the increase in the amount of tax money collected by Seaside Vista. However, before the recommendation can be properly evaluated to have the predicted result, three questions need to be answered.
Firstly, is the increase in the number of new business loan applications the local banks received due to the 20% increase in visitors reported by the tourist board? It is possible that the new business owners had it in plans to apply for loans prior to the increased number of visitors the town had, making the increased in the number of new business loan applications and the increased number of visitors a coincidental situation or perhaps the new businesses aren’t all owned by the new visitors but mostly by the inhabitants of the town. If the above is true, then the argument holds water.
Secondly, are Brindleburg town and Seaside Vista town roughly comparable? That is, can evaluations made on Seaside Vista town hold true for Brindleburg town? Seaside Vista town could probably be larger than Brindleburg town in land mass has a good terrane which aided the creation of a new municipal golf course and resort hotel and also, Seaside Vista might perhaps have natural tourist-worthy objects and resources which compliments the new resort and golf course attracting more of these visitors. If these scenarios stated above hold true, then the recommendation stated in the original argument is weakened.
Finally, even if the new municipal course and hotel resort led to an increased percentage of visitors, does it result in an increase in the amount of tax collected by Seaside Vista? It is possible that the increase in the amount of tax collected is due to other sectors aside from the new resort and golf course or perhaps taxes that were not being paid earlier on were being paid. Also, the visitors might not be involved in paying taxes since they are just on a temporary visit to the town. If the above is true then the argument is flawed.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is flawed due to numerous unwarranted assumptions. If all three questions stated above can be answered and more evidence can be provided perhaps through a thorough research study, the recommendation of a similar golf course and resort hotel in Brindleburg town can be adequately evaluated to have the predicted result of additional tax revenue for the town.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'might', 'perhaps'.
Suggestion: might; perhaps
...nd resort hotel and also, Seaside Vista might perhaps have natural tourist-worthy objects and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 494, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... just on a temporary visit to the town. If the above is true then the argument is ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9443254818 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75846718707 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404710920771 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.921070644 57.8364921388 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.3125 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1875 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406266688134 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139877554587 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105777887591 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228289391674 0.128457276422 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949758193759 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'might', 'perhaps'.
Suggestion: might; perhaps
...nd resort hotel and also, Seaside Vista might perhaps have natural tourist-worthy objects and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 494, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... just on a temporary visit to the town. If the above is true then the argument is ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9443254818 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75846718707 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404710920771 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.921070644 57.8364921388 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.3125 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1875 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406266688134 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139877554587 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105777887591 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228289391674 0.128457276422 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949758193759 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.