The argument claims that because of available of new supplier, Sartorian should resume production of deluxe alpaca overcoats which discontinued five years ago. To support the conclusion, the arguer cites that company have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since their major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. The arguer also points out that the price of most types of clothing has risen in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and company profits will increase. However, this argument suffer from several flaws and based on poor assumption and is therefore unpersuasive.
First of all, the arguer indicate that company have a new fabric supplier, they should resume production so that coat should sell very well. Here arguer badly assume that the coat should sell very well. Perhaps, it is possible that after they resume production, the people do not buy coat. The new supplier increase the price for supply and so that the amount of alpaca overcoats increase and because of this people cannot buy coats. In this case before production, the company must take survey of customers and then make any conclusion. Without considering all possibility, the arguer cannot assume that the coat will sell very well.
Another problem of this argument is that they assume that our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat so that here will be pent-up customer demand. It is possible that they stop production of coat because the demand was decrease. So if demand was decrease then how demand will increase. So here arguer badly assume that there will be pent up customer demand.
Thirdly, the arguer assume that customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats on the bases of other types of cloth's raised price. It is possible that in five years, customers are more comfortable of that type of cloths so that they pay more money on them. If customers are not comfortable of alpaca overcoats then they do not pay money. Without any evidence the arguer cannot make any conclusion.
In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the arguer must require more information about the supplier. In order to better evaluate, the arguer give the different possibility of why major competitor stop production of coats. The arguer consider all this things and then make any conclusion.
- The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing."Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of 16
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...lpaca overcoats increase and because of this people cannot buy coats. In this case b...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f coat because the demand was decrease. So if demand was decrease then how demand wil...
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Line 7, column 295, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hs so that they pay more money on them. If customers are not comfortable of alpaca...
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Line 10, column 286, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ction of coats. The arguer consider all this things and then make any conclusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08653846154 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5207716955 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413461538462 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.7365979215 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1818181818 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0557690019729 0.218282227539 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0195180809438 0.0743258471296 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325967216374 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0320042114334 0.128457276422 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328055890372 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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