The president of Bower Builders argues that it would be necessary to increase the size of the family rooms and kitchens and should introduce state-of-the-art kitchens in all their homes in order to boost sales and profits. Stated that way, the argument fails to consider several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify this argument, the author states that a survey conducted nationwide has revealed that people look for a large family room and a large and well-appointed kitchen when buying a home. Furthermore, the author also states that their competitor, Domus Construction, have been able to sell homes much faster with higher prices because of such feature. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion.
First of all, the president of Bower Builders points out that their competitor have been able to sell homes at a price which is more than the price of an average home nationally. This is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate the correlation between the price of the house by Domus Construction and the average price a house of that locality. To illustrate further, the price of a home in a dense and populated metropolitan city like Mumbai will always be higher than a house located in the suburbs. The author should have provided an comparative study of the prices of the house of their competitor and the nearby houses in order to make the argument convincing for the reader.
Furthermore, the author readiy assumes that since multiple recent buyers opted for no seperate dining room, all of their buyers will be looking for that. This is merely an assumption made without any solid ground. For example, we do not know how many recent buyers Bower Builders had recently. The authors idea of many can be 10. It is also plausible that 10 buyers out of the recent 50 buyers opted for such. In order to make the argument more convincing, statistics should be provided.
Finally, the president concludes that following the results of the survey and building bigger family rooms and kitchens will improve sales and the overall profit made by Bower Builder. Even if we agree that survey reading was accurate and the people are really looking for such homes, still careful scrutiny of the conclusion raises some skeptical doubts. Has the president considered the price of rebuilding the houses when calculating about estimated profits? Rebuilding will take time and Bower Builders would not be able to sell those house during the constructin period. So, does the company have enough revenue to continue with such a decision? Without he answer to such questions, the reader will be left with an impression that the author's claims are more of a wishful thinking than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. In order to bolster it further, the president must provide more clear concrete evidence, preferably by the way of a detailed survey of the home owners. Finally, to better asses the argument, we need more information regarding the sales and profits of their competitior, Domus Construction.
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- The following appeared in a memo from the president of Bower Builders, a company that constructs new homes."A nationwide survey reveals that the two most-desired home features are a large family room and a large, well-appointed kitchen. A number of homes 26
- "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis 16
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 528 350
No. of Characters: 2593 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.794 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.911 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.401 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 792, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion. First of all, the presid...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...burbs. The author should have provided an comparative study of the prices of the ...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...buyers Bower Builders had recently. The authors idea of many can be 10. It is also plau...
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Line 7, column 652, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Without the answer'?
Suggestion: Without the answer
...venue to continue with such a decision? Without he answer to such questions, the reader will be l...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tantive evidence. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, regarding, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2653.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 527.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03415559772 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68949478191 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476280834915 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3108056673 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.541666667 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9583333333 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169171218237 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479525054742 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711113949816 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963749522015 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687310850428 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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