The topic raises an interesting issue discussing the best method to prepare the younger generation of a society to grown up and occupy positions of leadership in government and various other fields. Indisputably, a sense of competition pushes a person to be the best version of themseves. However, the most important motive of a leader is to lead and look after other people while acieving the goals. Thus, I would generally disagree with the fact that competition is vital in the younger generation, and would argue that a sense of cooperation asures that the wellbeing of the people working below the future leaders will be appreciated and not ignored.
First of all, i would like to point out that the true essence of leadership is to look after people all around. To illustrate further, let us look at the example of Steve Jobs. His first stint as a CEO of Apple is a good example of what a leader should not be. Their were complaints from the Apple office and the Board members that before the release of Lisa 2, he did not respect his employees properly and even went to the extent of criticizing them in front of the public. He disrespected the opinions the employees had about his ideas and acted narcissistically. Thus, the release of Lisa 2 was a failure, and shortly after he was fired as the CEO of Apple.
Furthermore, it is also important that a leader listens to other ideas and opinions from people working below him. This enables a leader to make the best decisions and see all sides of a problem. Specifically, let us consider Kanye West as an example. He is known to gather artists and producers from all around and works together for months. There have been reports that he once asked a delivery guy his opinions on the album Kanye was producing and even credited him properly in the album. The famous entrepreneur, Gary Vee, once said that a leader should speak last. This emphasises the point that a leader should first listen to all the ideas and then form his ro her opinion.
Finally, it also needs to be admitted that competition pushes human limits. A person cannot unleash his or her true potential if they are not feeling the pressure of other people trying to succeed them. For example, let us look at the two UFC fights of Conor McGregor and Nate Diaz. In the first fight Conor lost, but he came back for a rematch and defeated Nate Diaz, a result the critics did not expect. However, too much competition spoils the mind. It then becomes all about the achievements and not the end result. The government cannot afford to be competetive and raise the economy while depriving the citizens of their basic rights as a result.
In conclusion, however a sense of competetiveness is necessary, althhough
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 426, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'disagree that'.
Suggestion: disagree that
...ving the goals. Thus, I would generally disagree with the fact that competition is vital in the younger gen...
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Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...iated and not ignored. First of all, i would like to point out that the true e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69854469854 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.652857161 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505197505198 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0705614396 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.24 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0976241649118 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255707797592 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293584463404 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552803097924 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319206704841 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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