The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently , we signed a contract with the FlyAway Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City , but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company , which we have used for many years in Palm City , continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored
there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of FlyAway ."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In the memo, the vice president of a food distribution company argues that they should return to Buzz off for all their pest control services, which they have used for many years. Although the argument of the vice president may seem valid at first, the lack of solid evidence leads me to question the validity of the argument.
First, the vice president should supply more concrete evidence on the soundness of the result from Fly-Away pest control company.He states that they contracted with the company recently to provide pest control services in palm city, but it led to pest damage of $20,000 worth of food last month. However, it is possible that “last month” situation is temporary because of the weather. it may have been hot and humid last month. In addition, they “recently” signed a contract with the Fly-Away. Thus, they should monitor food damage in the long run. therefore, contracting with the Fly-Away company may not have detrimental effect on their company.
Next, the vice president needs to supplement the argument with more solid evidence on the validity of the comparison between Fly-Away and Buzzoff. it is plausible that Winterville, where Buzzoff has worked for many years, may be located in the north so the temperature might be lower than palm city where Fly-Away worked. As a result, to compare them, he needs to consider innate conditions of two cities. Moreover, the food damage worth between them should be indicated by the form of percentage. it is likely that the storage warehouse in palm city is very substantial, so $20,000 food destroyed may be minute. On the other hand, the storage warehouse in Winterville is small so $10,000 might be substantial. therefore, Fly-Away may not harm to the food storage warehouse in palm city.
Lastly, more specific evidence is needed on the prices of two companies. The vice president admitted that the price charged by Fly-Away is substantially lower than Buzzoff. In all likelihood, the price is a very significant issue to save money and the price of Buzzoff may be extremely expensive. Besides, it would be far-fetched to state that returning to Buzzoff is the “best” way to save money. There are better ways. Buzzoff can be recommended to most services, not all services.
In brief, the argument is not sound. To bolster the argument, the vice president should provide the aforementioned evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1919 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.834 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.406 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion the validity of the argument. First, the vice president should supply ...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...sult from Fly-Away pest control company.He states that they contracted with the co...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...on is temporary because of the weather. it may have been hot and humid last month....
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Line 5, column 578, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ld monitor food damage in the long run. therefore, contracting with the Fly-Away company ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trimental effect on their company. Next, the vice president needs to supple...
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...omparison between Fly-Away and Buzzoff. it is plausible that Winterville, where Bu...
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Line 9, column 507, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...be indicated by the form of percentage. it is likely that the storage warehouse in...
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Line 9, column 716, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...is small so 0,000 might be substantial. therefore, Fly-Away may not harm to the food stor...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...od storage warehouse in palm city. Lastly, more specific evidence is needed...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o most services, not all services. In brief, the argument is not sound. To ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84932647499 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474747474747 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.4921327142 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2173913043 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312986093164 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802783377273 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964319965735 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157980690832 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107084972689 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.