The vice president of the company made a recommendation to use Alpha construction company over Zeta construction company to build new projects. While the vice president's recommendation might hold water, it is based on some assumptions which, if proved wrong, will seriously weaken the argument. To evaluate the argument properly, the following concerns should be addressed.
First, it is not mentioned in the argument what materials were used by the two companies to build those buildings. It is possible that Zeta used premium materials that would give the building more strength and a better look and feel. On the other hand, Alpha may have used normal materials that do not guarantee long-lasting. If this is the case, simply comparing the building cost without analyzing the materials used would seriously weaken the argument.
Second, it is unclear how long it took for both companies to build those identical buildings. It is possible that Zeta used the latest technologies to build the structure which helped them to complete the construction within a short time which also incurred more cost. On the other hand, Alpha may have used traditional methods to build the structure which led them to take more time to complete the construction but saved money. It should be mentioned in the memo which one the Vice President of the company prefers between time and money. If they do not care about how long the companies take to build a building and only care about saving money, then choosing Alpha over Zeta could be a good one. However, if the vice president prefers to have the construction completed within a short time, he should choose a constructor who is efficient. Selecting a constructor based on how much they spend without analyzing their methods and value for money would weaken the argument.
Third, it is mentioned that the maintenance cost in the Zeta building was twice of the Alpha one. However, it is not clear how well both buildings were maintained. It is possible that Zeta buildings were maintained well. All of the materials such as air conditioner, lifts, etc were taken care of regularly there were no defects which incurred more cost. On the other hand, the alpha building may not have been maintained well. Since the materials were not maintained and taken care of properly, they did not work properly. simply looking at the maintenance cost without looking at the performance of the building may lead to a weak argument.
Fourth, it is important to know to what extent the building built by zeta was used to consume more energy than the building by alpha. It is possible that more people work in the building made by zeta than in alpha. It is also possible that people work in the building made by zeta for longer hours than people who work in the building made by alpha. All these could result in higher energy consumption. Choosing a construction company based on the energy consumption of one building would weaken the argument.
Finally, the argument only compares one building made by alpha with another building made by zeta. It is possible that zeta cost more for that single building but usually spends less to build buildings. It is also possible that buildings made by zeta usually incur less cost but that one building was an exception. Moreover, buildings made by zeta may consume less energy usually but it was different for that particular building. At the same time, opposite things may happen to the buildings made by Alpha. Recommending one constructor by observing only one building made by them and comparing them with another building will weaken the argument.
To conclude, the vice president may have presented a sound recommendation to select a builder. However, more data is required to reach a firm conclusion. If the vice president addresses and analyzes the mentioned concerns, the argument can be properly evaluated.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...at Zeta buildings were maintained well. All of the materials such as air conditioner, lift...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 525, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Simply
...f properly, they did not work properly. simply looking at the maintenance cost without...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, well, while, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3245.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 649.0 441.139720559 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04732388556 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69425928563 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351309707242 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1003.5 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 19.7664670659 177% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.78244928 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.7142857143 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5428571429 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218574702761 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700220713457 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535105780096 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121320878541 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378147506347 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...at Zeta buildings were maintained well. All of the materials such as air conditioner, lift...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 525, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Simply
...f properly, they did not work properly. simply looking at the maintenance cost without...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, well, while, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3245.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 649.0 441.139720559 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04732388556 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69425928563 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351309707242 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1003.5 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 19.7664670659 177% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.78244928 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.7142857143 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5428571429 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218574702761 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700220713457 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535105780096 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121320878541 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378147506347 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.