The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on- the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Vice President of Quiot Manufacturing has given a statement saying that the increased number of on-the-job accidents compared to Panoply Industries is because of fatigue and sleep deprivation in the workers and suggests to decrease the working hours of the employees by 1 hour to ensure that they get enough time to sleep and relax well. This statement is based on many unwarranted assumptions. In order to critically evaluate the given statement, the vice president needs to answer the below questions.
Firstly, Are the working conditions of Quiot Manufacturing same as that of Panoply Industries? Do both the industries have the same number of workers? Lets say if Panoply Industries is a clay pot making company, where less mechanical equipment are used and most of the work is done by skilled labor instead of machines. While if Quiot Manufacturing produces steel bars or cast iron pallets. Drawing a comparison between both the industries on the On job accidents is really ridiculous. The Vice President stated 30% more accidents in Quiot Manufacturing, how is this 30% calculated. We are not given the information about the number of total workers in both the industries. So with out these information , we cannot evaluate the given statement.
Secondly, How can the experts be sure that the significant factor of the on job accidents is just fatigue and sleep deprivation? This statement is completely baseless. We are not informed about the proof with which the expert have come to that conclusion. Perhaps, the accidents are due to lack of safety measures in the factory. May be the machines are obsolete and cause damage to the workers. Probably, the accidents are due to risky methods of manufacturing . So, there could be various reasons these accidents could occur. Hence, in order to evaluate the Vice President's statement, we should be given more evidence.
Only when the above two questions answered, we can critically evaluate the given statement. We should be very sure about such decisions because these will affect the safety of the workers and factory's reputation. The missing pieces of information would be really helpful in evaluating the Vice Presidents claim.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1792 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.048 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.065 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...stries have the same number of workers? Lets say if Panoply Industries is a clay pot...
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Line 5, column 678, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...otal workers in both the industries. So with out these information , we cannot evaluate ...
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Line 5, column 687, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ers in both the industries. So with out these information , we cannot evaluate the given statemen...
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Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ndustries. So with out these information , we cannot evaluate the given statement....
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Line 9, column 335, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... of safety measures in the factory. May be the machines are obsolete and cause dam...
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Line 9, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...re due to risky methods of manufacturing . So, there could be various reasons thes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20281690141 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9076790616 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50985915493 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.9436802212 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9545454545 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31818181818 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218608601709 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645043082824 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078860166456 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135633527331 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863622600986 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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