The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station To reverse a decline in listener numbers our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock music format The decline has occurred despite population growth in o

According to the manager of WWAC radio station, WWAC should change to a news and talk format from current rock-music format to attract new residents in order to increase overall listener numbers. That’s because the population growth is due to new residents and the low local sales of music suggests that people in the area have little interest in music. However, to assess the argument, we need more critical evidence about the demographic structure and local people’s real attitudes towards music and the news and talk format.

It is assumed that the growth in population is mainly due to people moving here after their retirement. But we still need more evidence about the demographic structure. Maybe most of local residents are still born in the area and not retired. And perhaps these people didn’t listen to the radio before the population growth due to the lack of interest or the low quality of radio programs. In that case, the company should focus on attracting these people by improving the programs instead of changing to a new format with the danger of losing current listeners. If it is clear that new residents account for a large proportion of the whole population in the area, it would be reasonable to pay attention to make listeners of these new residents.

We also need to investigate people’s attitudes towards music. It is suggested that the low local sales of recorded music means people’s little interest in music. Maybe people tend to use the internet or the TVs to listen to music, or perhaps they prefer to go to concerts to enjoy live music. There are many ways for people to listen to good music, so it is not reasonable to assume their limited interest in music because of the sales. If it is proved that people still love music in many other ways, it would not be necessary to change to a new format.

We still need evidence about residents’ interest in the news and talk format. Because the radio is different from televisions and computers, maybe people prefer to get information of the news on TVs instead of radio programs. And they may believe that pictures and other forms of information that couldn’t be showed on a radio program very important, so the popularity of TV programs in the format doesn’t mean the success will happen to radio programs. In addition, we need some related research to prove the popularity of this format. If the popularity is flawed, the argument would not hold.

In conclusion, we still need more evidence about the issues mentioned above to assess the argument critically. Without more evidence, the argument now is not strong enough.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8836689038 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58703335274 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418344519016 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2714725225 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.952380952 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188907291826 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592630114038 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729035865637 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11014847744 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864656073845 0.0628817314937 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 450 350
No. of Characters: 2112 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.606 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.693 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.454 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.824 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5