The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The Mozart school of music is claimed to be the first choice for parents while considering their child in music lessons for welcoming youngsters from all age and ability, for offering all musical instruments of a wide range of styles and genres,for having the most distinguished faculties of the area and for having graduates succeeding in profession.However, before making the choice, parents need to address some questions about its possible flaws.
first of all,the school welcomes young stars at all ability and age level without taking any sort of audition which weakens its reputation as a well known school as any reputed school would not allow just any prodigy to join without any kind of aptitude test to keep its quality of attendants up to the level. Not having any particular age group demeans its way of monitoring its students as learners always find it interesting to have similar aged learners around them.
Secondly, offering all musical instruments of a wide range of styles and genres makes the school focusing on quantity over quality. A school must be specialized at some genres to provide the best education while keeping other genres insignificant. The faculty who would be great at classical music would not necessarily be equal in rock music as they differ way too much in style.
Finally, having the most distinguished faculties of the area does not ensure qualified faculty group as locally reputed faculty might not be widely accepted as a qualified professional. A local faculty might be good at a limited level and not enough resourceful to provide the quality education to a learner.
In conclusion, there are many questions that needs to be answered before making any judgement about choosing the best school for a child. More evidences in favor of the school's quality and approach on providing education must be provided to consider it as a valid one. it is possible that there are other music schools with better quality; therefore, parents must analyze possible scenarios prudently and then implement the best course of action.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10294117647 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76742513332 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517647058824 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.3704417071 57.8364921388 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.727272727 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9090909091 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 5.70786347227 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377544033173 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128054019928 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107258744982 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200897825059 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128309157828 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.3799401198 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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