The author mentions that the investors should invest in the new satellite television provider techcorporation as it will provide the investors with a lot of returns in the following time period. Here the author has given some of the few reasons to invest in techcorporation but they are not that convincing and satisfactory.
It is mentioned that techcorporation has developed a satellite technology what has been approved by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. Here we do not no if the new technology performs better than the existing ones or is on par with the existing technology. It could be also found out that the new satellite technology lacks the clarity and performance could even lead to even more dissatisfaction by the customers. Thus the author should have mentioned the performance statistics of the new technology as compared to the existing ones. That would have given a clear picture in deciding better one among the two providers.
It is also mentioned that a consumer survey had been conducted where 80 percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current television provider. This cannot be a through basis is assuming that the people would have chosen the new provider techcorporation. This survey had been conducted last year and maybe now all the dissatisfied customers must have changed their service provider and are happy with the performance. A more recent survey is required to analyze the percent of customers who are still not satisfied with their television provider. All these flaws in the authors argument may not go well with the investor's end outcome if they invest in techcorporation.
Thus the author needs to provide more concrete reasoning and statistical evidence to convince the investors that techcorporation is the right choice for investment at this time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... time period. Here the author has given some of the few reasons to invest in techcorporatio...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...rent satellite provider. Here we do not no if the new technology performs better t...
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Suggestion:
...nology lacks the clarity and performance could even lead to even more dissatisfac...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... more dissatisfaction by the customers. Thus the author should have mentioned the pe...
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...ormance statistics of the new technology as compared to the existing ones. That w...
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Suggestion: thorough
...t television provider. This cannot be a through basis is assuming that the people would...
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...y had been conducted last year and maybe now all the dissatisfied customers must ...
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...vision provider. All these flaws in the authors argument may not go well with the inves...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...e if they invest in techcorporation. Thus the author needs to provide more concre...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238709677419 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.196774193548 0.15541462614 127% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0709677419355 0.0836205057962 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0612903225806 0.0520304965353 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0290322580645 0.0272364105082 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116129032258 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0806451612903 0.0416121511921 194% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.10015875321 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225806451613 0.026700313972 85% => OK
Particles: 0.00322580645161 0.001811407834 178% => OK
Determiners: 0.138709677419 0.113004496875 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0322580645161 0.0255425247493 126% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00967741935484 0.0127820249294 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1833.0 2731.13054187 67% => OK
No of words: 296.0 446.07635468 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.19256756757 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.57801047555 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35472972973 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.290540540541 0.287650121315 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22972972973 0.208842608468 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.168918918919 0.135150697306 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10015875321 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 207.018472906 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496621621622 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 49.0524311299 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7692307692 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.720238004 57.7814097925 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 141.986410481 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.615384615385 0.724660767414 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.8232848233 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.51685393258 1.8405768891 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339817514486 0.441005458295 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.133021573719 0.135418324435 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0605246400235 0.0829849096947 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.634743457295 0.58762219726 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160964005472 0.147661913831 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164130906905 0.193483328276 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679547111103 0.0970749176394 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.422655817363 0.42659136922 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0878724675202 0.0774707102158 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264666427007 0.312017818177 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425430927742 0.0698173142475 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.