A lot of people grow up admiring their role model and wish to become like them some day. There are many young people who admire some sportsperson and movie stars and its their dream to maybe meet them or become half as good as them in the future. These admirations among those young people develop from the role the superstars play in their respective fields. We have also seen many young people growing up to be like their role model and later giving credit to their role model for inspiring them to become successful.
It is true that sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models as it is the dream of many such young people to be like them one day. We have seen many modern day examples of superstars obliging to pose with their fans or even have a candid talk with some of them. Lets take the example of sports star and cricketer Virat kohli. He admired Sachin tendulkar when he was young and aspired to be like him one day and today he is among the top batsman playing the sport . He has already gained lots of young peoples attention who already admire him as their role models. Even though he is a established sportsperson he has also funded many to many charity organizations and old age homes. People who admire him can also learn a lot from his attitude and his concern for the society.
It is true that they earn a lot of money but but that should not be a reason for them to fulfill the societal responsibility. It is the people who learn from them as they are already famous. A regular guy cannot inspire the other person to do something generous or good for the society but if its their role model who promotes such a thing they get inspired and follow them. Overall the actions of the superstars have a lot of effect on the young people who admire them and if they can stand up to their reputation a lot of good things can be learnt by those young people and it will lead to a wholesome development of the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e some sportsperson and movie stars and its their dream to maybe meet them or becom...
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...ese admirations among those young people develop from the role the superstars pla...
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...them to become successful. It is true that sports stars and movie stars have a...
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...ports star and cricketer Virat kohli. He admired Sachin tendulkar when he was you...
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...generous or good for the society but if its their role model who promotes such a th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232375979112 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.159268929504 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.088772845953 0.0880659088768 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0339425587467 0.0497285424764 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.11227154047 0.0444667217837 252% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.104438642298 0.12292977631 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0313315926893 0.0406280797675 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.2586998368 2.79330140395 81% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0365535248042 0.030933414821 118% => OK
Particles: 0.00783289817232 0.0016655270985 470% => OK
Determiners: 0.0913838120104 0.0997080785238 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0156657963446 0.0249443105267 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0182767624021 0.0148568991511 123% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1965.0 2732.02544248 72% => OK
No of words: 368.0 452.878318584 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33967391304 6.0361032391 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.58838876751 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.247282608696 0.366273622748 68% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.14402173913 0.280924506359 51% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0815217391304 0.200843997647 41% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.054347826087 0.132149295362 41% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.2586998368 2.79330140395 81% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 219.290929204 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445652173913 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.0791671874 55.4138127331 83% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6194690265 73% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5333333333 23.380412469 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0691169047 59.4972553346 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5333333333 23.380412469 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.674092028746 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.94800884956 61% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 38.9355072464 51.4728631049 76% => OK
Elegance: 1.20512820513 1.64882698954 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436259200719 0.391690518653 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13329531043 0.123202303941 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0559451749009 0.077325440228 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.512700075942 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138894119834 0.149214159877 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180645911003 0.161403998019 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915928443333 0.0892212321368 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428197456118 0.385218514788 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00735926561319 0.0692045440612 11% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338028864573 0.275328986314 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303694580662 0.0653680567796 46% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.