The following appeared in a newsletter published by the Appleton school district.
"In a recent study more than 5,000 adolescents were asked how often they ate meals with their families. Almost 30 percent of the teens said they ate at least seven meals per week with their families. Furthermore, according to the same survey, teens who reported having the most family meals per week were also the ones least likely to have tried illegal drugs, tobacco, and alcohol. Family meals were also associated with lower rates of problems such as low grades in school, low self-esteem, and depression. We therefore recommend that families have as many meals together as possible. We predict that doing so will greatly benefit adolescents and turn troubled teens away from bad behaviors."
Write a response in which you discuss which questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to newsletter published by the Appleton school district, it states that having many meal together with family will greatly benefit adolescents and turn troubled teen away from bad behaviour. Additionally, they support this argument by stating that the result of survey which is conducted with 5,000 adolescents. Those who take meal with family stay away from illegal drugs, tobacco and alcohol. However, before this recommendation can consider as a true some question must be answered.
Firstly, do you think survey which was carried out was sufficient to draw this conclusion? Maybe, 5,000 adolescents were not sufficient to carry out this survey or survey which was carried out was in the less crowded area which brings this conclusion. If this turns out to be true than I think we cannot consider this up shot true. Maybe, if this survey was carried out at large scale than outcome may be differ.
Secondly, What if adolescents stay away from his/her parents? Or what if adolescents taking meal with the family still drink or smoke? In this case this survey turns out to be false. Tough taking drugs is illegal, it depends on the family background. If we assume that adolescents family drink, smoke and take drugs than there are pretty high chances that adolescents will also start doing the same. I think that this all depends on the teaching of child’s parents, if a child is grown with lots of love and care he/she will not follow such dark path.
Finally, do adolescents grades in school or low self-esteem, and depression have to do anything with family meal? Maybe, his/her intellectual level is low which is causing problem with his/her study which result in low grades. Depression can be caused by many ways so do self-esteem. Maybe, talking about his/her depression over a meal is not the perfect place this will only increase his/her depression as his/her all negative points will be discussed over a meal. If this turns out to be true in most cases than conclusion drawn from the survey is false.
In conclusion, if all question above are answer than it will strengthen the argument and maybe we can draw conclusion that survey which is drawn is perfect.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1763 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.432 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.27 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.323 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...wded area which brings this conclusion. If this turns out to be true than I think ...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adolescents'' or 'adolescent's'?
Suggestion: adolescents'; adolescent's
...he family background. If we assume that adolescents family drink, smoke and take drugs than...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 468, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e points will be discussed over a meal. If this turns out to be true in most cases...
^^
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that survey which is drawn is perfect.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, i think, in conclusion, talking about, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94308943089 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55629833415 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493224932249 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2981235159 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160403289779 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05714659885 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556565916405 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970463559873 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605098636683 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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