The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal."A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situ

The following argument is insufficient for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument states that there was a high level of cortisol on first time pregnant women than on monkeys how have several offspring. A monkey with high levels of cortisol does not mean the fetus will experience high levels of stimulation. It can be the first time parent monkeys experience high levels of cortisol because it is the first time they are experiencing a pregnancy but that does not mean that their fetus will experience high levels of cortisol.

The argument also states that first time human borns also experience high levels of cortiosol in stimulating situations. One, although human dna and monkey dna are very similar, monkeys are humans are the same. Second, it is important to consider that the stimulant situation, seeing the return of a parent after an absence is very different to the one done for monkeys, interacting with a monkey stranger

Furhtermore, the study was done on only 18 monkeys. Population size is not big enough to assume that birth order effects the levels of cortisol in monkeys. Had the argument provided information on the research on past studies with similar results, the argument could be stronger. Event then, the argument would have to prove further information on why specifically the order of a monkey's birth can effect cortisol levels.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1142.0 2260.96107784 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 224.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09821428571 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69517177428 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 204.123752495 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513392857143 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 705.55239521 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7895062945 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.2 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160925554792 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710377267054 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283152470551 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111372802664 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039311143787 0.0628817314937 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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