According to the recommendation of the committee, due to the decling birthrate in Calatrava, they advise serial suggestions to appropriate the fund from the young to the adults, which involved decreasing education and infrastrucures for playing fund, increasing the fund for facilities and programs for adults to attract more adluts. The suggestions are problematic and let's rexamine them carefully.
To begin with, the author doesn't find out the reason for birthrate decreasing dramatically, then he simply attrubute this decling to the lack of adults. There must be some important reasons for this eighty percent decling ,compared with the data five years ago.May be the adult who at their best age for being parents would not like to be DINK rather than have a baby. The author should make a wide survey to discover the huge shift because this changing means to much to a city.
Secondly, the current children will suffer from this appropriation as the reducing fund on education and playing facilities. Even though the authority worries about the lower birthrate, they should not do harm to be benefits of the children about t go to the shcools. There is a possiblity that the population of children fit for primary school is so high that the current education fund is insufficient. Wihout the survey of the current education condition ,it is arbitrary of the author to make this suggestions.What's more, there's no obvious evidence show the necessity of reducing the fund of playing infrastructures and recreational facilities, as we do not know how many kids now in the city. If the authority ruduce the fund, there is a high possility that the kids parents who are also adults would complain abou this measure , even worse they will leave the city with their kids and make the place much less people than before. This serious circulation woul bring about other issues in the future.
Thirdly, thether the adults will be attacted by this funding plan is still in question. Beside these compaining parents we discuss above, here we should make clear that a city should not be a place contained by a certain age of people.Fearing the decling of birthrate and turn to the adults to increase people will bring no benefit to the city as the population balance will be violated. Thus the adults will not be in favor of such city with few children,which means the education and other related area will not be suitbale for a family, in the future the adult will leave,too.
In conclusion, the huge decling of birthrate will be the key point to the committee to make survey before the make any descisions. The potential decling in population should not be balanced by attract adults.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: According to the recommendation of the committee, due to the decling birthrate in Calatrava, they advise serial suggestions to appropriate the fund from the young to the adults, which involved decreasing education and infrastrucures for playing fund, increasing the fund for facilities and programs for adults to attract more adluts.
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: infrastrucures Suggestion: infrastructure
Error: adluts Suggestion: adults
Sentence: The suggestions are problematic and let's rexamine them carefully.
Error: rexamine Suggestion: examine
Sentence: To begin with, the author doesn't find out the reason for birthrate decreasing dramatically, then he simply attrubute this decling to the lack of adults.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: birthrate Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: attrubute Suggestion: attribute
Sentence: There must be some important reasons for this eighty percent decling ,compared with the data five years ago.May be the adult who at their best age for being parents would not like to be DINK rather than have a baby.
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Even though the authority worries about the lower birthrate, they should not do harm to be benefits of the children about t go to the shcools.
Error: birthrate Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: shcools Suggestion: schools
Sentence: There is a possiblity that the population of children fit for primary school is so high that the current education fund is insufficient.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: If the authority ruduce the fund, there is a high possility that the kids parents who are also adults would complain abou this measure , even worse they will leave the city with their kids and make the place much less people than before.
Error: ruduce Suggestion: reduce
Error: abou Suggestion: about
Error: possility Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This serious circulation woul bring about other issues in the future.
Error: woul Suggestion: would
Sentence: Thirdly, thether the adults will be attacted by this funding plan is still in question.
Error: thether Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: attacted Suggestion: attracted
Sentence: Beside these compaining parents we discuss above, here we should make clear that a city should not be a place contained by a certain age of people.Fearing the decling of birthrate and turn to the adults to increase people will bring no benefit to the city as the population balance will be violated.
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: birthrate Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: compaining Suggestion: complaining
Sentence: Thus the adults will not be in favor of such city with few children,which means the education and other related area will not be suitbale for a family, in the future the adult will leave,too.
Error: suitbale Suggestion: suitable
Sentence: In conclusion, the huge decling of birthrate will be the key point to the committee to make survey before the make any descisions.
Error: descisions Suggestion: decisions
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: birthrate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The potential decling in population should not be balanced by attract adults.
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2186 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.773 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.474 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...carefully. To begin with, the author doesnt find out the reason for birthrate decre...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... reasons for this eighty percent decling ,compared with the data five years ago.Ma...
^^
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: May
... ,compared with the data five years ago.May be the adult who at their best age for ...
^^^
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...mpared with the data five years ago.May be the adult who at their best age for bei...
^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... huge shift because this changing means to much to a city. Secondly, the curren...
^^
Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...urvey of the current education condition ,it is arbitrary of the author to make th...
^^
Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... ,it is arbitrary of the author to make this suggestions.Whats more, theres no obvio...
^^^^
Line 5, column 515, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whats
... of the author to make this suggestions.Whats more, theres no obvious evidence show t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 515, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... of the author to make this suggestions.Whats more, theres no obvious evidence show t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...or to make this suggestions.Whats more, theres no obvious evidence show the necessity ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 833, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... adults would complain abou this measure , even worse they will leave the city wit...
^^
Line 5, column 912, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...with their kids and make the place much less people than before. This serious circul...
^^^^
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Fearing
...ce contained by a certain age of people.Fearing the decling of birthrate and turn to th...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 389, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...he population balance will be violated. Thus the adults will not be in favor of such...
^^^^
Line 7, column 456, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... in favor of such city with few children,which means the education and other related a...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 575, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , too
...mily, in the future the adult will leave,too. In conclusion, the huge decling of ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95575221239 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79186706037 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484513274336 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.3518286767 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981420880173 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303710356934 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032223868356 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609503444459 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264003874786 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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