The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
The tufted groundhog that lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg has been living there for some years and access road is to be built to allow people maybe pass through the roads. The author in the prompt believes that the same type of access road built at a neighboring Eastern Carpenteria led to it's population decline. This conclusion is flawed and I will be presenting the following three reasonings to weaken the evidence presented by the author.
Firstly, building an access road to the West Lansburg will make the environment more beautify and also make it easy for Veterinary services to access the location. The author do not state whether in 1978 that similar road was built in Eastern Carpenteria, there was a predator that caused the population to decline or even maybe there was a particular disease that affected the community that time. Concluding that the access road built cause the decline is only been wise by half.
Secondly, is there any other evidence to proof that the access road constructed led to the decline in population of Eastern Carpenteria tufted groundhog? If the author had made mention of any material used in road construction that is known to be harmful to tufted groundhog, that would have been subjected to further research but stating outright that it endangers the population is not only flawed but not a compelling reason enough not to build the road.
Furthermore, this is year 2021 and not year 1978. What is obtainable in year 1978 is not obtainable again in year 2021. Time has changed. There has been advancement in technology and also more people now tend to believe in the rights of animals and also considering the fact that some legislations has been made as regards the co-habiting of humans and animal, most people now believe in not endangering the tufted groundhog specie. Building the access road will even allow more people to know more about the tufted groundhog specie and thereby making the location a tourist attraction and create revenue for the local authorities of West Lansburg.
I think the author might fear that the tufted groundhog might be hunted by human beings due to the access road created, but with legislations already in place and also the public enlightenment of people, building the access road will not reduce the population of the tufted groundhog. In summary, the evidence given by the author and comparing West Lansburg to neighboring Eastern Carpenteria is flawed and does not hold any water. The local authorities should go ahead and build the access road to make the location a tourist attraction and also make it easier for veterinary services to access the location.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2185 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.866 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.091 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... decline is only been wise by half. Secondly, is there any other evidence to...
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...reason enough not to build the road. Furthermore, this is year 2021 and not y...
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... local authorities of West Lansburg. I think the author might fear that the t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, as regards, i think, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95545657016 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63398788402 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427616926503 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.4931696308 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0625 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172266905482 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644099064016 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793488569691 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114541658651 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429266117739 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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