At first sight, the author's claim that banning cell phone usage on sidewalks can address the problem of 'sidewalk rage' seems persuasive, after analyzing this passage closely, it will betray several logical flaws and fallacious assumptions and therefore the argument made in the passage is somewhat weakened and not as convincing as it seems. One must critically and objectively analyze data and proof which support their claims.
First of all, the author fails to present a statistical correlation between cell phone usage on sidewalks and so-called 'sidewalk rage'. Without any statistics, we can not simply ascribe the problem of 'sidewalk rage' to cell phones. True, texting or talking on the phone while walking on sidewalks may impede the flow of pedestrian traffic, but there could be other causes for the problem. For example, there might be an increase in poor people in the city, resulting in a higher incidence of sidewalk crimes. The city council can do a thorough investigation of substantiating the relationship between cell phone usage and 'sidewalk rage' to corroborate their claim.
Secondly, the claim cites an example of another city insisting that banning cell phone usage in Middletown has contributed to a decrease in complaints as well as a significant drop in sidewalk crime rate. However, this claim is not taking manifold differences between cities, such as population, density, poverty rate, crime rate, ethnicity into account. All of these diversities could have a different impact on the 'sidewalk rage', therefore simply imitating other cities' policy and blindly incorporating them can not always bring promising results.
Thirdly, the passage provided no scientific proof or data when arguing that children are especially vulnerable to cellphone usage because they are hard to discern. This claim can be easily refuted by the fact that people often look down if they are using phones when walking, thus children are not as susceptible. In order for the argument to bolster his or her claim, a series of scientific experiments should be conducted to verify if people cannot notice short things when they are using their cellphones and walking at the same time.
Finally, to recapitulate my idea, this passage seems cogent at first glance, however, lack of scientific evidence and statistic data detract from the persuasiveness of the claim for the aforementioned reasons.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1970 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.951 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
... rage, therefore simply imitating other cities policy and blindly incorporating them c...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30971128609 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79514620232 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57217847769 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5696055415 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2142857143 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 5.70786347227 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0842622270832 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339351938544 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316535932259 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433248706001 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392731813101 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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