The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly.
The city council at Centerville receives a petition stating that there was significant increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage' on roads.As a result of this sidewalkers assaults, property damage, and disruptions of typical pedestrian traffic, surged in numbers. The one who filed this petition assumes that the usage of cell phones on sidewalks is main reason behind this chaos in public areas. so, it suggests to ban the usage of cell phones on sidewalks similar to Middletown where there is a ban on cell phones on sidewalks. The petitioner is right insofar, but in broader perspective, the petition fails to underscore many points it raised. Since it is based on many unsubstantiated assumptions.
Firstly, The petitioner implies that over past three years there is increase in sidewalk rage. But petitioner fails to give the reason for the rage in the pedestrians. Even if we assume that some walkers are furious--petitioner fails to offer enough evidence to support assumption that mobile is responsible for that rage. There may be several reasons for his/her rage , it may be some personal issue, or a mental condition of the walker, or it can be even most of the times the fellow pedestrian causing some type of disturbance.It would in turn result in assault and disruptions of pedestrian traffic. For example there may be a group of vandals and teasing and causing the warp the public. The petitioner nowhere mentions about them. If this situation is true then mobile has nothing to do with the sidewalkers rage.
Even if we assume that petitioner claim is true about mobile phones are responsible for this chaos in the city, then there are some points the petitioner need to work on. Firstly, has he/she mentioned that there has been surge in this type of crimes since three years, but petitioner fails to juxtapose the usage of phones and three years back. If the mobile phone sales in Centerville plummeted over last three years it widely undermines the given argument. To strengthen his/her argument the author would benefit from gathering enough evidences to underscore his statement.
Lastly, the petitioner says that there was similar kind of ban on cell phones in Middletown and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly. But petitioner in making this statement surely have not done any analysis or at least he did not present it here in the argument. This point greatly lose its validity when there is a comparison between both the cities. For example, in Middletown usage of phone per average individual may be more than in Centerville, and also population of Middletown is high compared to Centerville. Another possibility is that the location of Centerville and Middletown also comes into consideration. If we assume Middletown is a country side with less number of people and only youth in that place uses phones, then that may be the reason they might not have received the any complaints when phones were banned and previously there were few sidewalk crime because of phones and they might have gone down significantly. It may be not the same case with Centerville.
In conclusion, petitioner can be found largely found deficient of the evidences that needed for supporting mobile are the only reason for sidewalk crime. Other than mobiles there may be vandals, mentally disordered people, drunkards, and etc be reason for this sidewalk crime and it would completely annul the petitioner point, banning mobile phones to cut the sidewalks felony.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-10-11 | grittygirl | 82 | view |
- All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary.s regularly even if there is a smal 62
- Discussing controversial topics with those with contrasting views is not useful because very few people change their mind when questioned about their core beliefs. 66
- The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. Th 82
- The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. Th 79
- Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permi 63
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 591 350
No. of Characters: 2889 1500
No. of Different Words: 256 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.931 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.888 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...ease in cases of sidewalk rage on roads.As a result of this sidewalkers assaults, ...
^^
Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ason behind this chaos in public areas. so, it suggests to ban the usage of cell p...
^^
Line 1, column 397, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests banning'.
Suggestion: suggests banning
...hind this chaos in public areas. so, it suggests to ban the usage of cell phones on sidewalks s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 640, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ls to underscore many points it raised. Since it is based on many unsubstantiated ass...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... may be several reasons for his/her rage , it may be some personal issue, or a men...
^^
Line 5, column 839, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...petitioner nowhere mentions about them. If this situation is true then mobile has ...
^^
Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e usage of phones and three years back. If the mobile phone sales in Centerville p...
^^
Line 13, column 154, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n if for a moment, petitioner is correct , parents wont allow such small children ...
^^
Line 13, column 319, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...nts hold their children. The petitioner didnt mention anything about there will more ...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 460, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'accrued'.
Suggestion: accrued
...ntion that at least, it would have been accrue his stand on the point. Lastly, th...
^^^^^^
Line 21, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly disordered people, drunkards, and etc be reason for this sidewalk crime and it...
^^
Line 21, column 363, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sidewalks'' or 'sidewalk's'?
Suggestion: sidewalks'; sidewalk's
...point, banning mobile phones to cut the sidewalks felony.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, may, so, then, at least, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 28.8173652695 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 55.5748502994 157% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3461.0 2260.96107784 153% => OK
No of words: 688.0 441.139720559 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03052325581 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12149920406 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76638120011 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 204.123752495 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441860465116 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1098.9 705.55239521 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.67365269461 657% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1145300534 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.15625 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90625 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 20.0 6.88822355289 290% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104293355867 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327505269617 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435799020087 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601495948816 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365493565146 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 98.500998004 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.